These days, people are so occupied with different activities that they don’t have time to breath. They want to do various activities and learn different skills at the same time. While some people believe that it is better to fill your daily program with a variety of different activities others are of the opinion that this will prevent them from performing well any of the tasks. I agree with the latter one. I feel this way for two important reasons.
Firstly, we are more likely to succeed when we only focus on one specific thing and aim to do that well. when we choose to do only one task at a certain time we are able to dedicate all our energy and concentration to that one specific work and therefore, it is more probable that we carry out that work successfully. For instance, my sister used to have a very busy schedule. Because she wanted to learn different skills and wished to make the best use of her time. She attended computer classes, took Spanish and English courses and also worked as a piano teacher all at the same time. first she thought that she would get used to the busy life she had planned but after a while she realized that she couldn't do any of the activities efficiently and was overwhelmed by the huge amount of things she had to do. So she decided to just eliminate some of the task and only focus on one activity, after that she felt relieved and could focus much better on the things she wanted to do.
secondly, doing different things at the same time requires planning. Most people have a hard time sticking to their schedule specially when it is busy. They find it difficult to make a schedule that includes all of their tasks that they want to accomplish and often get confused while planning their tasks. Even when they manage to plan their activities they feel stressed by looking at their plan and can’t get their tasks done well. For example, one of my friends had to take an important exam which required a great deal of time, she believed that she could manage to study for her exam and work simultaneously and felt so proud of herself but afterward she regretted having made this decision, not only didn't she pass the test but also she was fired from her job because of several mistakes she had made. If she hadn't worked while studying for her exam she had passed her test.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is impossible to get various things done perfectly. This is because of the fact that people find it difficult to stick to a busy schedule and having several things to do makes it harder to focus on each task.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...earn different skills at the same time. While some people believe that it is better t...
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Line 2, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...specific thing and aim to do that well. when we choose to do only one task at a cert...
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Suggestion: First
...s a piano teacher all at the same time. first she thought that she would get used to ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...but after a while she realized that she couldnt do any of the activities efficiently an...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...to do. So she decided to just eliminate some of the task and only focus on one activity, af...
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Suggestion: Secondly
...tter on the things she wanted to do. secondly, doing different things at the same tim...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ted having made this decision, not only didnt she pass the test but also she was fire...
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Suggestion: hadn't
...f several mistakes she had made. If she hadnt worked while studying for her exam she ...
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Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
... various things done perfectly. This is because of the fact that people find it difficult to stick to a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5170212766 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34811984736 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455319148936 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.240957944 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.15 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230710637724 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828437096977 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671708746559 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168495537515 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352547371274 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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