Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Nowadays parents are so occupied and busy that they hardly find time to spend with their children. There is a heated debate regarding the way parents should spend their time with their children. Some people may hold the view that, parents should dedicate this time to provide their children with leisure activities such as playing games or doing sports. However, others are for the belief that, they would better use this time to help children with their homework. I agree with the former one. I will explicate my points of view through the following paragraphs.
The first noteworthy point to be mentioned is that every single child needs to do activities which makes her happy and causes her to enjoy her life. Parents have a key role in entertaining their children and creating joyful moments for them. To illustrate the concept, take for example, when I was in elementary school I used to be home alone for long hours and used to get bored and depressed because there was no one who I could play with or talk to, and the only time that I could see my parents was the weekend, So I couldn't wait until weekend to spend some quality time with my parents going to park or playing games together. If my parents had spent the weekends sitting home and helping me with my lessons, I would have felt awful and bored to death.
The second point which is worth some words is that, it is essential for all children to dedicate some of their time to doing sports and physical activities in order to remain healthy. In other words, children spend most of their time doing mundane tasks such as studying and sitting in one place which causes them to feel bored and tired, but engaging in some kind of sport will not only make them feel more energetic and happier but it can also help them stay in shape and healthy. For example, my cousin who is ten years old used to spend all his time studying or playing with his smartphone, he had gained so much weight and felt terrible, when his parents realized this, they decided to change their weekends schedule, they arranged to gather with friends in the park and play different sports. Since then my cousin has lost all the extra weight and feel more energetic.
To wrap it up, I firmly believe that, the best way for parents to spend time with their children is developing hobbies which involve physical activity and create enjoyable moments for their children because it is the natural need of every single child to have fun and enjoy his life. Furthermore, it will bring a healthier lifestyle for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ld see my parents was the weekend, So I couldnt wait until weekend to spend some qualit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, for example, kind of, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61453744493 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22600496408 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47577092511 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.430362291 48.9658058833 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 130.9375 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.375 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402869110456 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132306221006 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952268043926 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256127776087 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061190822045 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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