Certain key experiences help us mature from children into young adults. Describe one of those key experiences in your life.
As gold needs to pass through the fire to be purified, so does one needs to experience hardships for him or her to grow. when a person faces hardships, he or she remembers that she or he has to act upon them, and that's what I define as growth. throughout my lifetime, I have experienced different things which allowed me to mature mentally; however, my experience in a boarding school is the one to which I attribute the largest portion of my growth.
I recall my first time in Groupe scolaire Notre Dame du Bon Conseil, the boarding school in which I studied, it was not difficult for me to adapt, as my elder sister was studying in the same school. I would go to her whenever I pleased and request for her help and guidance. Nevertheless, she was remaining with only one year there, while I had to stay there for three years. At the end of that year, she left school, and it was time for me to take care of myself.
it was not easy for me to adapt. I started the term with tears; my stipend had been stolen. it was a result of me not being used to keeping money for myself. I was too afraid to tell my parents about what had happened; I was afraid to be blamed. On the visiting day, my mother gave me more money. By then, I had learned techniques in which I could keep my money in such a way that it cannot be stolen, and it worked out. From then on, I was able to keep the money by myself.
In addition, at the end of the semester, I returned home without having any sportswear while I had taken with me three pairs. my parents were furious when they became aware of that. I was referred to as careless which made me feel very sad. Therefore, I decided that for the next time, I will make sure that not even a single t-shirt of mine will be stolen. Thus, I started being very cautious about where I placed my clothes after washing them, and I would keep them as soon as they become dry. From that experience, I developed into a person who can keep her properties in a safe way.
To cut the whole story short, I would say that throughout my life, I went through different experiences that taught me different life lessons. however, I consider my boarding school experience as the most prominent because it played a crucial role in my maturity. I say that because, it was through my time in a boarding school that I learned to keep money for myself, and to take care of my properties, which are the characters that I believe a person must have to be judged as mature.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 95.0 43.0788530466 221% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.30720338983 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41624180672 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489406779661 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 29.0 9.59856630824 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1571066721 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3913043478 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5217391304 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52173913043 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0646814847414 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0214506572726 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329404038751 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0442981902349 0.150856017488 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337316984036 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.72 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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