should we devote time and money to building a space station on the moon or Mars? Why or why not? Explain your answer
Advanced technology is important, but it should not obsess people. Developing a space station would undoubtedly enhance the modern technology; however, the world still has many urgent issues which lay unsolved. Those include education-related problems, deadly diseases, and the youth who need to be redirected. These issues are the ones that really need to be addressed in the first place.
Firstly, there are still many regions in the world where education is not well developed. From the article " the luckiest girl" by Nicolas Kristoff, a Kenyan girl who had no hope of getting an education due to poverty became the first person to get the highest degree in her region. This was because of a goat that was donated to her family to increase their income. If a donated goat can make a significant impact on a person, imagine the changes that would occur if the huge amount of money, that would have been used to build a space station, was invested in education. I believe the world would be much better as it will be filled with literate people.
Moreover, people who are dying from the lack of adequate medical treatments need urgent rescue. For instance, in the Democratic Republic of Congo, Ebola is resulting in countless deaths, for the virus has taken unprecedented forms that doctors are unable to handle. If funds were raised to control deadly diseases, they would enable doctors to research more about the virus in advanced laboratories, which would boost their ability to cure those diseases. Thus, caring for people's well being by supporting the medical sector should be the world's priority.
Finally, the world's youth is facing fatal problems like drug abuse yet they are the future leaders of the world. Rehabilitation centers are one of the most efficient ways to overcome this issue. However, there are only two rehabilitation centers in Rwanda, my home country, while it still has a high percentage of young people who are drug addicts. This is not due to the Rwandan government not willing to help the youth, but it is because there is a shortage of income to invest in rehabilitation centers. Therefore, it is inferred that nations should opt to invest in solving the problems with their youths instead of developing space stations.
To sum up, though building a space station would be a remarkable achievement for the whole world, they are still many issues, such as inadequate education, poor health care services, as well as juvenile drug abuse that should be solved beforehand.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 540, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...orting the medical sector should be the worlds priority. Finally, the worlds youth is...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...d be the worlds priority. Finally, the worlds youth is facing fatal problems like dru...
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Line 5, column 327, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...l has a high percentage of young people who are drug addicts. This is not due to the Rw...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, as well as, to sum up, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00952380952 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6706772562 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557142857143 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1756521055 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.736842105 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1052631579 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73684210526 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0737652471703 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0218703917504 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349817030513 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0472449127032 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271104056379 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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