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Voting in a democracy is a very important act of patriotism. Not every country allows its citizens to participate; therefore, we should really appreciate the fact that in the United States we can vote. However, I think that not everyone should be able to vote. It is an act that must be taken it seriously. In my opinion, adolescents just above 15 should not be able to vote. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Young adults at age of 15 or 16 don't have fully understand how life works, nor have had much experience in their life. That is to say, at that age they haven't finished high-school, thus, it is unlikely that they have had experiences such as travelling abroad or debating with people with different point of views about politics and many others experiences that an older person would have in order to understand the importance of the voting process. For instance, when I was 15 years old all I cared about was joking around and not taking anything seriously. If at that time I had been able to vote, I would probable vote for an underdog candidate just for fun. I would not fully understand the process and I would probably try to convince my friends to do the same thing as me. I don't think I had the maturity enough to vote. However, at a later stage of my life when I was 18 years old, I felt that I was able to understand the process better and not thinking that the voting process was a joke.
Secondly, young adults should enjoy their lives first and not worry about politics at that age. What I mean by that is if adolescents fully understood the process, some of them would not want to keep their friends anymore because they might believe in something else. Adults already have that problem when they find out that someone that they care about is voting for somebody that they dislike. My personal experience is a compelling of this example, last year in my country we had presidential elections, and it was the most polarized process that I have ever seen. Some of my family members stopped talking with each other because of their different personal believes. My 15-year-old cousin did not understand why my mom was upset at his mom. Therefore, I think young adolescents should not have to face that unpleasant experience at that moment of their lives.
In conclusion, I think that young adults just above the age of 15 should not be able to vote. The voting process is an important act of a democracy and 15 years-old children do not have the experience enough to understand the voting process. They should enjoy their youth and not worry about fighting over politics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, i mean, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58139534884 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5411136453 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446088794926 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3712169226 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2173913043 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5652173913 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91304347826 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0199692848064 0.236089414692 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00683138930748 0.076458572812 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320420560693 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0250292251035 0.150856017488 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433518895533 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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