Voting in a democracy is a very important act of patriotism. Not every country allows its citizens to engage; therefore, we should really appreciate the fact that in the United States we can poll our candidates. However, I think that not everyone should be able to vote. It is an act that must be taken it seriously. In my opinion, adolescents just above 15 should not be able to vote. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Young adults at age of 15 or 16 do not have fully understanding of how life works, nor have had much experience in their life. That is to say, at that age they have not finished high-school, thus, it is unlikely that they have had experiences such as travelling abroad or debating with people with different point of views about politics and many others experiences that an older person would have in order to understand the importance of the voting process. For instance, when I was 15 years old all I cared about was joking around and not taking anything seriously. If at that time I had been able to choose my president, I would probable vote for an underdog candidate just for fun. I would not fully understand the process and I would probably try to convince my friends to do the same thing as me. I do not think I had the maturity enough to vote. However, at a later stage of my life when I was 18 years old, I felt that I was able to understand the process better and not think that the voting process was a joke.
Secondly, young adults should enjoy their lives first and not worry about politics at that age. What I mean by that is if adolescents fully understood the process, some of them would not want to keep their friends anymore because they might believe in something else. Adults already have that problem when they find out that someone that they care about is voting for somebody that they dislike. My personal experience is a compelling of this example, last year in my country we had presidential elections, and it was the most polarized process that I have ever seen. Some of my family members stopped talking with each other because of their different personal believes. My 15-year-old cousin did not understand why my mom was upset at his mom. Therefore, I think young adolescents should not have to face that unpleasant experience at that moment of their lives.
In conclusion, I think that young adults just above the age of 15 should not be able to vote. The voting process is an important act of a democracy and 15 years-old children do not have the experience enough to understand the voting process. They should enjoy their youth and not worry about fighting over politics.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, i mean, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55925155925 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5555680107 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442827442827 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6904427886 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.347826087 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9130434783 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91304347826 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259741929057 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881348136863 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935283456507 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215677022907 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139346486116 0.0645574589148 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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