Children should only play sports for fun, or play sports in competition or contest?
Playing sport is always a interesting hobby for children to do. However, people will ask, should children play sports for fun or for competition? Some people may prefer children should play sports only for fun, but I think it is better for children to play sports in competition.
To begin with, competitions is the motivation for children to develop faster. To be more specific, competitions include win and loss. When children win a game, they will feel the hard work they had done and keep putting effort during the practice. Also, children who lost can learn about ways to improve themselves. Take a tennis team as an example, if the children in the team only play tennis for fun, they are not going to put any effort during practice, because when there is no competitions involve, children will not have the pressure and ambitious to win the game. Therefore, children should play sport in competitions. During the competition, they will focus on others’ advantages and use it to improve themselves. Moreover, since they have the ambitious to win the game, they will try their best in the competition in order to dominant. In this way, children can improve themselves not only independently but also more efficient than children who play sports for fun. Indeed, by playing in a competition can help children have a faster development. As a result, children should play sports in competitions instead of playing for fun.
In addition, competitions are actually a more interesting way to play sports. The reason why I say this is because when people play sports just for fun such as throwing baseball to each other or shooting the basket, it can be very boring for children. Think about playing card games, who will want to play card games without a winner and losers? For instance, I used to be in a tennis team. During the practice, we can learn a lot but that is not the part we like to do. The thing we actually want to do is to join competitions, because competitions involve many different aspect. We need to use the techniques our coach teach us and think about the strategies to win the game. Beside, every child have a dream of being a professional player and so do I. Every time when I hit a great shot, I feel like I am Roger Federer, which is my favourite tennis player from Sweden. Moreover, when we win a competition, we can receive some rewards and this is another reason why we like to attend competitions. As a result, competitions are the most interesting part of playing a sport. Therefore, children should definitely engage in competitions when they are playing sports.
Undoubtedly, some people may say that it is better for children to play sports just for fun, because playing in a real competitions can cause some serious conflicts and it is not good for children’s develop. However, I think learn to solve conflicts is also a ability children need to learn about. Thus, children should play sports in competitions instead of playing for fun.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
Playing sport is always a interesting hobby for children to do. H...
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Line 2, column 471, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no competitions'?
Suggestion: there are no competitions
...ny effort during practice, because when there is no competitions involve, children will not have the pre...
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Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
... play sports. The reason why I say this is because when people play sports just for fun su...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...petitions, because competitions involve many different aspect. We need to use the techniques o...
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Line 4, column 120, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'competition'?
Suggestion: competition
...just for fun, because playing in a real competitions can cause some serious conflicts and it...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... think learn to solve conflicts is also a ability children need to learn about. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79029126214 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80317609343 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.409708737864 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.4088050045 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0689655172 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7586206897 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13793103448 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 28.0 11.8709677419 236% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.583756342205 0.236089414692 247% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.218948694369 0.076458572812 286% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.226609583483 0.0737576698707 307% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.49296089832 0.150856017488 327% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159331413654 0.0645574589148 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.63 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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