electronic database
The listening lecture totally opposes to the reading passage in whether electronic database is helpful for doctors. To begin with, the reading says that electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing medical records. However, the listening argues that this is unlikely to be significant. Even though the doctors will look at the electronic records more oven, they would still keep the paper record for emergence. In other words, although they often use the electronic database, they will still need a space to keep these paper records for back up uses.
In addition while the reading suggests that electronic records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors, the listening asserts that doctors will still use pen and paper to take notes about the information of the patients. These information will be enter to the electronic database later by the office staff. As a result, unclear writing can still cause some mistakes while staffs are entering the informations. Indeed, this reason is not convincing.
Last but not least, the reading indicates that electronic database can greatly aid medical research by gathering large amount of data from patients' records. However, the listening implies that this explanation is also incorrect. It will be extremely difficult for doctors to collect information about patients, because since United State have strict privacy laws, patients are allow to keep their personal information without letting any notice from other people. If doctors really need these information, they will need to go through some complicated process and permissions in order to receive the records. To say it differently, doctors need permissions to receive information about each of their patients, so electronic database is not likely to be helpful for them to collect large amount of informations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...e paper records for back up uses. In addition while the reading suggests that electro...
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Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'These informations'?
Suggestion: This information; These informations
... about the information of the patients. These information will be enter to the electronic databas...
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Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'allowed'.
Suggestion: allowed
... have strict privacy laws, patients are allow to keep their personal information with...
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Line 5, column 384, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'keeping'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: keeping
...strict privacy laws, patients are allow to keep their personal information without lett...
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Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...om other people. If doctors really need these information, they will need to go through some comp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, really, so, still, while, in addition, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35616438356 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66923001837 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530821917808 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5127315098 49.2860985944 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.714285714 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263366188776 0.272083759551 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105038448691 0.0996497079465 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116674290332 0.0662205650399 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198748703979 0.162205337803 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273659402527 0.0443174109184 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.8541721854 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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