Edmontosaur's migration hypothesis

Essay topics:

The listening lecture totally opposes to the reading passage in the topic of edmontosaur's migrating hypothesis. First of all, the reading says that the edmontosaur's diet can support this idea because they need to migrate to find enough food to eat. However, the listening argues that edmontosaurs actually do not need to migrate for food. In ancient time, the climate is warm, so many plants were grown in this place. Therefore, edmontosaurs can get food in their normal habitat. In other words, there is no need for edmontosaurs to migrate for food.

Secondly, while the reading suggests that evidence had show that edmontosaurs lived in herd and many modern migration animals also live in herd, the listening asserts that this fact does not solve the problem. The reason of animals that live in herd is not only for migration, but also for other reasons such as more protection to avoid predators. The listening also give an example of a specie of elk that live in herd but the purpose in not for migration. Indeed, edmontosaus live in herd does not show any evidence that they will migrate in the winter.

Last but not least, the reading indicates that adult edmontosaurs were physically capable of migrating long distances. However, the listening argues that young edmontosaurs cannot travel for long distances. If they have a long travel, the young will be able to follow the group, and since the herd will not abandon their young, the whole group will be stuck. At the end, it will be dangerous for edmontosaurs because it is extremely difficult for them to survive in the harsh winter condition. To say it differently, even though edmontosaurs can travel in long distance, it is not a good idea for them to do so.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...: 19.36px;'> migrating hypothesis. First of all, the reading says that the ...
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Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'showed', 'shown'.
Suggestion: showed; shown
... the reading suggests that evidence had show ^^^^
Line 5, column 482, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...e young will be able to follow the group, ^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, such as, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3396.0 1373.03311258 247% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 375.0 270.72406181 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 9.056 5.08290768461 178% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 8.45325173462 2.5805825403 328% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416 0.540411800872 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 802.8 419.366225166 191% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.1 1.55342163355 135% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 108.296424482 49.2860985944 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 226.4 110.228320801 205% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 25.0 21.698381199 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0339195165413 0.272083759551 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329423361664 0.0996497079465 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0259543270611 0.0662205650399 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0320779496351 0.162205337803 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00991727239935 0.0443174109184 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.7 13.3589403974 252% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 3.8 53.8541721854 7% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 5.55761589404 263% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 11.0289183223 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 35.56 12.2367328918 291% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.2008830022 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Edmontosaur&#039;s migration hypothesis

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