providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment.
In modern life, environmental issues are always a huge problem for people. Many farmer use modern agricultures for farming which can harm the environment. Some people may say that providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment. However, I totally disagree with this statement.
To begin with, if we damage the environment, the farming land will also be destroyed. To be more concise, nowadays, people often drive their cars to rather schools or works. These vehicles can create lots of carbon dioxide which can increase the rate of global warming. Global warming include many disasters and it will destroy the farm lands. For example, global warming can cause the sea level to rise. In some country, they are located at a lower attitude, so the rise of sea levels can flooded the farming land or even the whole country. How can people plant crops if they do not have lands? Beside, farmer always like to use lots of chemical fertilisers for farming because it can stimulate the plant to grow faster and these farmers can earn more profits. However, using too many chemical fertilisers can cause these soil become acid. If the soil is acid, people cannot use it for farming anymore. As a result, people need a good quality of environment in order them to grow crop and provide foods. Indeed, protecting the environment is more important than growing plants.
In addition, modern agriculture can also cause disorientation in the natural habitat. When farmers are using modern agriculture for farming, it also require deforestation, because they want to own more land for farming. However, deforestation can destroy the natural habitat for some animals that live in the trees such as birds or some insects. When these animal become extinct, it will also lead to the extinction of other species because they do not have enough foods for them to survive. This might take a long time, but eventually, all of the animals will become extinct because they do not have a place to live. As a result, using modern agriculture to grow plants can cause animal extinction. Indeed, protecting the environment is the priority for people to do instead of using modern agriculture to provide foods worldwide.
Undoubtedly, some people may say that it is a lot more important to provide food for the growing population around the world, because if there are not enough foods, it might cause some diseases or war in the world. However, it is true that providing food for the growing population around the world is important, but there is only on Earth. If we damage it, where are we going to live? Therefore, I think that protecting the environment is far more important than using harmful modern agricultures to plant food.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'requires'?
Suggestion: requires
...modern agriculture for farming, it also require deforestation, because they want to own...
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Line 3, column 537, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...might take a long time, but eventually, all of the animals will become extinct because the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94206008584 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62239574071 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448497854077 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1615835945 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2962962963 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2592592593 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382555795922 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118496710929 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175349293561 0.0737576698707 238% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.331613996023 0.150856017488 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.195104021324 0.0645574589148 302% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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