People should maintain their dream even though the dream is challenging. Or they should focus more on the dream that is more realistic and down to earth.
In people’s life, every single person has a dream that they want to accomplish. However, most of the dreams are really challenging. Some people may say that people should maintain their dreams even thought it is challenging, while other thinks that people should focus more on the dream that is more realistic and down to Earth. In my opinion, people should definitely maintain their dreams.
To begin with, if people have a dream that they want to accomplish, they will work harder to reach their goal. To be more specific, people will often be lazy when they stay realistic because there is nothing challenging for them to do, and even they work for many years, their ability will not improve. However, if people have a dream they want to achieve, they will set up schedule and work hard till they reach their goal. For example, my dream is to become a professional tennis player, tennis player requires a lot of training and practicing, so I practice tennis about 5 hours a day. Even more, since I still need to take care of my school works, I also spend about 7 hours to study. It can be extremely tired for me, but because I want to achieve my goal, I will force myself to keep up even though I am tired. If I do not have a goal, I might just give up and spend those time watching television program or playing video games. As a result, having a dream is the motivation for people to work harder. Therefore, I strongly agree that maintaining their dreams is beneficial for people.
In addition, people can learn more if they have a dream they want to accomplish. During the process of accomplishing their dreams, people might face many difficulties, so they need to find out some solutions to solve the program and when they are trying to solve problems, they can learn all sorts of things. Take my friend as an example, his dream is to study in NTU, which is the best university in Taiwan. In order to do this, he need to score almost the full mark on the test. Therefore, he start asking his friends or teachers to help him. While he is studying for the test, he not only learn a lot of knowledges but also improve his time management skill. Since he has a lot of work that need to be done, he will need to plan his time precisely and make sure that he did not wasted any time. Besides, since the requirement of NTU include a presentation, he can also improve his social skills when he is working on the presentation, because during the process, he need to learn how to clearly describe his point to the audience and help them understand his point of view. As a result, he improve his ability just because he has a dream. As a result, people can learn many things when they have a goal they want to reach, so people should definitely maintain they dreams even though it is challenging.
Undoubtedly, some people may say that people should focus more realistic, because in order to accomplish a dream, people often need to spend more time working on it, so it can be more efficient and effective for people to stay realistic. However, people will work harder when they have a goal that they want to accomplish. Therefore, it will not waste any time because they are still learning. Indeed, I strongly agree that people should maintain their dreams.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 495, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
...he full mark on the test. Therefore, he start asking his friends or teachers to help ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 781, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'waste'
Suggestion: waste
...precisely and make sure that he did not wasted any time. Besides, since the requiremen...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1093, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'improves'.
Suggestion: improves
...tand his point of view. As a result, he improve his ability just because he has a dream...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1268, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'dream'
Suggestion: dream
... people should definitely maintain they dreams even though it is challenging. Undoubt...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in addition, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 31.0 9.8082437276 316% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2673.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 590.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53050847458 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47675838315 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.398305084746 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 13.0 3.51792114695 370% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6540322738 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8518518519 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25925925926 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43243182973 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145655718171 0.076458572812 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147884417131 0.0737576698707 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.36528472395 0.150856017488 242% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.188869287802 0.0645574589148 293% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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