A high school plans to ask their students (aged 16-17) to choose an activity to do during the summer vacation between 11th and 12th grade. Which activity do you think is more beneficial.
1.Attend weeks of university-level courses (for example, a course related to the major field they are interested in)
2.Visit museums and historic places with teachers and other students and then write a paper on it.
During the summer, it is extremely important for students to well manage their schedule and attend activities that is more beneficial for them. Therefore, if a high school is planing to ask their students to choose an activity to do during the last summer vacation before they study in university, I think students should definitely choose to attend weeks of university-level courses.
To begin with, students can have a better plan for their future when they attend pre-college courses. In fact, students can find out their strength and weakness and find out if they are actually interest in a specific subject. After doing this, students can plan for their future beforehand because they already have their own idea for their future. For example, a student might find out that instead of science, he actually has more passion in mathematic. Therefore, he can start spending more time on math rather than science. As a result, it can be really beneficial and more efficient for students. On the other hand, if students visit museums and historical place and then write a paper on it, they will not have the opportunity to learn about their future unless he or she is interest in art or history. Therefore, only attending pre-college courses can help students have a better future plan. Indeed, students should attend university-level courses during their summer vacation.
In addition, if students attend pre-college courses, they can contact with more courses. To be more specific, high school require the most fundamental courses such as history, mathematic, or science. However, when student attend a pre-college courses, they can see some more specific categories. Take science as an example, in my country, high schools only teach the basic part of science, so it can be hard for students to have a deeper understanding. However, when they attend a pre-college courses, they can find out that science actually include many different categories, such as biology, chemistry, geology and even astronomy. These are the subjects that high school do not teach. As a result, it is extremely beneficial for students to attend university-level courses during their summer vacation.
Last but not least, students can learn some extra information that is useful when they need to study in university. When students attend pre-college classes, they can learn not only about a specific courses, but also the skills that can help them do better in the future. For example, students can learn about the requirement of his or her dream school. This is a extremely information for students to learn, because they can prepare the requirement first such as GPA and the score of SAT or ACT. Indeed, by taking pre-college courses can help students learn some more extra information and successfully enter his or her dream school.
Undoubtedly, some people may say that it is better to visit museums and historic places and then write a paper on it, because they can improve their writing skills while writing a paper. However, we are talking about the last summer vacation before study in university, so it is a great opportunity to join some pre-college courses. Besides, students can visit museums and historic places at any time, but their is only one chance to attend pre-college courses. To sum up, I think the best activity for students to do during their last summer vacation in high school is to attend university-level courses.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, in fact, such as, talking about, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 9.8082437276 245% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2863.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08525754885 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78193809083 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.383658969805 0.524837075471 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 887.4 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5398707516 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.037037037 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8518518519 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.18518518519 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306343457949 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120720580501 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110224036241 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233408235444 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114663127308 0.0645574589148 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.68 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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