pikas
The listening lecture totally opposes to the reading passage in whether global warming is hostile to the survival of American pikas. To begin with, the reading says that pikas die due to overheating because they are thick-furred animals. However, the listening argues that pikas can stay underground when the temperature is too high. When pikas feel threaten by the rising temperature, they will find places to refuge such as some shade and stones. I other words, the rising of temperature will not cause any harm to pikas because they will find a place to hide.
Secondly, the reading indicates that since pikas need to find and store food during the summer, high temperature can kill them while they are active. Whereas, the listening suggests that this is not likely to be true. Pikas will eat less if the temperature is rising. They will save the food they eat in the summer for them to eat during the winter. Therefore, they will not need to spend lots of energy and die during the hot summer. As a result, since pikas will be less active while the temperature is rising, they will not be easily kill during the hot summer.
Lastly, the reading asserts that global warming will cause the decrease of snowpack, and if there are no snowpack, pikas will die of freezing high in the mountain. Likewise, the listening implies that when the snow melt faster, it means that the winter will be shorter. Therefore, pikas can find fresh food earlier and this can increase the reproducing rate of their young. To say it differently, by receive fresh food earlier can pikas reproduce their next generation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re can kill them while they are active. Whereas, the listening suggests that this is no...
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Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'snowpacks'?
Suggestion: snowpacks
...crease of snowpack, and if there are no snowpack, pikas will die of freezing high in the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, lastly, likewise, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, while, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 5.04856512141 357% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 276.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81884057971 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41058324337 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 145.348785872 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 408.6 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9225786464 49.2860985944 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.6666666667 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291537008088 0.272083759551 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130149662695 0.0996497079465 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980868994301 0.0662205650399 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228424859146 0.162205337803 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051191789407 0.0443174109184 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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