To be a successful person, one must be open to new ideas and willing to change his or her mind.
Before people become successful, they often need to face many difficulties, so they need to figure out some solutions to solve the problem. Some people say that in order to be successful, people must be open to new ideas and willing to change his or her mind, while other disagree with this statement. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this statement with several reasons.
To begin with, for students, being open minded can improve their school grades. To be more concise, since it can be hard to solve some problems by ourself, we often ask others about their experience or ideas and use it in our own studies. Take me as an example, when I first start to study in high school, there are many works, presentations, or exams I need to finish. Moreover, since I am not familiar to everything in the school, I cannot study in a effective and efficient way, so my grades were not very good. Therefore, I ask some questions to other students who had been study in this school for a few years, they are more familiar to the school so they can give me lots of tips. Such as how to study effectively for the exam, or how to plan the schedule precisely without wasting any time. So, I follow these tips and then my grades in the school improve because I can study effectively without wasting any time. As a result, when students follow others advices, they can improve their study habit and have a better grades. Indeed, people should definitely be open to new ideas.
In addition, if people are open minded, they can have more chances to learn new things. When people listen to others ideas, it can be the motivation for them to learn some different skills. For instance, my dad is a business manager in his company. When he was in college, business is his major. One day, one of his friend ask him if he want to join the tennis team, since he is open to new advices, he accept it and join the team. He learn a lot of skills while he is playing tennis and his skills is good enough for him to be a coach. Therefore, his job right now is not only being a business manager, but also a tennis coach. In this way, he become successful because he can earn more money than others. Therefore, people can have the chance to learn new things when they are open minded, so they should definitely be willing to change their minded.
Undoubtedly, some people may say that people should not be open minded, because trying new ideas are often risky and it will have a high chance to lead to the result of failure. However, people can still learn many things even they fail on doing something. They can learn from their mistake and find out some effective solutions to prevent making the same mistakes again. Therefore, only by open to new ideas can people become successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 451, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ything in the school, I cannot study in a effective and efficient way, so my grad...
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Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...ne day, one of his friend ask him if he want to join the tennis team, since he is op...
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Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'accepts'.
Suggestion: accepts
...am, since he is open to new advices, he accept it and join the team. He learn a lot of...
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Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
...ces, he accept it and join the team. He learn a lot of skills while he is playing ten...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2257.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47817460317 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34919210501 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44246031746 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3245227699 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.28 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.16 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.32 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275580682056 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858835384245 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106000746914 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181473550647 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584457235737 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.7 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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