Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If a person wants to be successful, he or she must be open-minded to new ideas and willing to change his or her mind.
Success, the foundation of personal development, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over the impact of openness to new ideas. Being adhere to own position, in some people’s views, is an effective tactic in the work field. Contrary to these people’s perspectives is my standpoint that it is more likely for the people who are opened to new ideas and willing to change his mind to achieve success, due to the contributions to the efficiency and interpersonal relationship.
What must be prioritized is that being willing to switch his viewpoints, instead of clinging to original viewpoints, is beneficial to productivity, by reducing errors in work and saving working tome. To begin with, never can we ignore the significance of openness to people’s working efficiency. In detail, the mistakes committed at work can be easily discovered and revised by the people giving faithful advice, which can definitely enhance the productivity; in contrast, the less willing to consider and accept others’ standpoint, the harder to locate and correct mistakes, causing working inefficiency. Moreover, it is listening to and accepting others’ suggestions that help people save time. To explain it further, spotting and correcting mistakes is time-consuming, so it is vital and essential to be opened to others’ viewpoints, which can make individual decisions and strategy flawless; on the other hand, will the man skip the process of discovering and revising errors without others’ proposal?
What should be equally worth discussing is that maintaining an open mind to others’ views, rather than keeping inflexible on own ideas, can promote people’s interpersonal relationship, by boosting relationship with colleagues and executives. To begin with, it is well-acknowledged that being a good listener, people can develop positive relationships around the office. Specifically, only by exchanging ideas more will people hamper the communication gap in the workplace and build harmonized office atmosphere; on the contrary, no one wants to work with a stubborn fellow worker, which will knock out the workplace interaction in the long run. Additionally, the man who is opened to others’ thinking can always keep a good relationship with the leader. To be more specific, a supervisor always place the employee with openness as the candidate of promotion, so he will gain appreciation of the leader; however, it is difficult for a conservative employee to develop a good relationship with the executive, and even there is a risk of being hired.
Productivity, the foundation of people’s future success, will be boosted if people are opened to others’ views; interpersonal relationship, essential contributors to individual future success, will be facilitated, if people are always ready to accept others’ suggestions. To conclude, only by maintaining an open mind to others’ views, instead of clinging to own ideas all the time, can people reap numerous benefits.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, well, in contrast, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2588.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60173160173 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.42377720254 2.67179642975 128% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493506493506 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 800.1 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.0227813448 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.533333333 100.406767564 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22118262386 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881329271802 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447545665091 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155185671021 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362695078327 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.3 11.7677419355 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 10.9000537634 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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