To be a successful person, one must be open to new ideas and willing to change his or her mind.
How to be a successful person? Regarding to this issue, people's views vary from individuals to individuals. Some people believe that we should keep ourselves ideas without changing, while others oppose this view. From my perspective, people who are opening and willing to change their ideas are more likely success in the future.
To begin with, the primary reason to support my opinion is that accepting new ideas and willing to change is a relative useful way for a leader to keep away from being isolated. Recently, the social development and technology innovation is so rapid that a leader must go ahead among numerous competitors. Otherwise, they will be obsolete by the world. Kodak, a really prosperous film company before, deserves to be mentioned. In the past, the film camera was really popular among people. Later, with the technological innovation, the electronic camera has been invented and released in the market. Suddenly, about 70 percent of consumers tend to buy such advanced camera instead of the old one. In contrast, Kodak still kept the stereotype toward camera market and resisted any updates. Finally, it has been ignored by public. Obviously, if the Kodak had invented more advanced devices, they would not have broken up.
Furthermore, another perspective we should not overlook is that a successful person willing to change can help her to achieve achievement in the future. To be precise, if people always have some brilliant and unique ideas that are totally different with others, they could attain more benefits from it. It is because they would like to try some new things and take the adventure about their thought. Jack Ma, a founder of Alibaba, is a good example. Before the decade, he thought that the electronic shopping will become a tendency. Planning this new idea, he invested about ten million to study this area and build the delivery service for online shopping. After 10 years, Alibaba became the biggest shopping website in China. Therefore, only by changing mind and jumping out from the comfort zone can leaders attain success continually.
To sum up, from what has been discussed, we may draw a conclusion that by accepting new ideas and willing to change their mind, not only can leaders keep away from isolated, but also leaders attain benefits in the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, look, may, really, regarding, so, still, therefore, while, in contrast, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08355091384 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57659888413 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579634464752 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.6403396536 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.652173913 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.652173913 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78260869565 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3123927854 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07752373586 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903378177581 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177803117733 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036791102183 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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