Antlers
The listening lecture totally opposes to the reading passage in the topic of functions of antlers. First of all, the reading says that the function of antlers is heat dissipation. However, the listening argues that this is not likely to be true. Researchers had find out that deers often lose their antlers during the hot summer month. Besides, evidences have shown that their antlers are actually lager during the cold winter climate. In other words, since deers often lost their antlers during the hot summer and they have larger antlers during winter, the propose of these antlers are not likely to be heat dissipation.
Secondly, the reading implies that antlers are serve as defensive weapon to protect their young. On the other hand, the listening indicates that these antlers are often on the male deers, and young deers were often take care by the female. If the propose of antlers are weapon, it should grow on females instead of males. Beside, evidences had shown that deers often kick their predators such as wolf instead using their antlers as a weapon. It is obvious, since antlers located on the top of their head, they will need to look down when they are attacking which is a very ineffective weapon. Indeed, deers do not use these antlers as a weapon to protect their young.
Last but not least, the reading asserts that antlers serve as a establishing predominance among males. However, the listening suggests that the two males will challenge each first, and they will make a sound to communicated. Besides, researchers have find out that the deer with smaller antlers do not usually back up, and some deers with larger antlers will actually walk away. To say it differently, the deer with larger antlers are not likely to establish predominance among males.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'found'.
Suggestion: found
... not likely to be true. Researchers had find out that deers often lose their antlers...
^^^^
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'found'.
Suggestion: found
... not likely to be true. Researchers had find out that deers often lose their antlers...
^^^^
Line 1, column 399, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'lagered'.
Suggestion: lagered
...e shown that their antlers are actually lager during the cold winter climate. In othe...
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Line 1, column 556, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...they have larger antlers during winter, the propose of these antlers are not likely to be h...
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Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... were often take care by the female. If the propose of antlers are weapon, it should grow o...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e reading asserts that antlers serve as a establishing predominance among males. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, such as, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 301.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.926910299 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37162767521 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46511627907 0.540411800872 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1169737055 49.2860985944 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6875 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8125 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451197956176 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.189059579273 0.0996497079465 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106385777373 0.0662205650399 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338456695327 0.162205337803 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302236285634 0.0443174109184 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.42419426049 86% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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