Do you agree or disagree? It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older.
People can never predict their future and what is the best way to do something. While some people think that it is better to visit a different countries when they are older, some people argues that it is better to travel when they are young. In my opinion, travel to different countries when they are young is a better choice.
First of all, people can have a better understanding in their own interests and lead to a better success in their future career when they travel at a young age. People are more likely to memorize things when they have some experiences during the young age. Therefore, by traveling to other country when they are young can be very beneficial, because they can experience varies kinds of cultures. Besides, every single country have their own advantages. For example, if someone is interest in making dessert, they can go visit Japan because they have some high quality of dessert. If another person is interest in architecture, he or she can go to Europe, because Europe contain many different styles of building. By having many experiences, people can have a deeper understanding in their interest and eventually lead to a better success in their future career. On the other hand, if people travel at a older age, there is no doubt that they can still learn a lot. However, they will not be able to use it in their career because they they are already old and even some of them were already retired. As a result, young people can not only have a deeper unstinting in their interests, but also have a better success in their future career. Indeed, people should travel to different countries at a younger age.
In addition, if people travel to other countries when they are young, they can enjoy the trip more. To be more specific, young people have a better body health, so they can attend some adventures such as bungee jumping or paragliding without any worries. Also, travel to other countries mostly contain a long flight and since some people are still young, they can have a better adaption on the long flight or the jet-leg. Take myself as an example, there is one time that I travel to America with my family and the time were 12 hours different. For me, it is extremely easy to deal with it because the only thing I need to do is to try to stay awake during the day time. However, it can be very hard for my parent because they will feel sick when they do not have enough sleep, so my parents do not have a good experience on that trip because of their body health. As a result, people should really travel to other countries when they are young because they can attend more adventures and they can have a better experience during the trip
Last but not least, if people travel to other country when they are older, it can be stressful for them. Since travel to other countries require many days, people that are older will have many matters that need to be considered such as who should take care of their kids and who should help them finish their jobs. Therefore, it can be extremely inconvenient and during the trip, they will not feel relax because they are still thinking about how to deal with many things. Indeed, people should travel to other countries when they are younger instead of older.
Undoubtedly, some people may say it is better to travel to other countries when they are older, because young people do not have enough financial support. However, I think people can work hard and save money for the trip. Beside, they can even have a better future when they travel to other country. Indeed, people should really travel to other countries when they are are still young.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: interested
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Suggestion: interested
...uality of dessert. If another person is interest in architecture, he or she can go to Eu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, while, even so, for example, i think, in addition, no doubt, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 15.1003584229 238% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 32.0 9.8082437276 326% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2982.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 648.0 407.700716846 159% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60185185185 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.04537849152 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29828459983 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.345679012346 0.524837075471 66% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 942.3 618.680645161 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4092223251 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166357019618 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814432806469 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729802182791 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155184329258 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598991268022 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.56 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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