Traveling to foreign countries could be extremely exciting and mesmerizing because one can observe different cultures of various people around the world. An unavoidable question which has been always the topic of contention and brought about heated debates is whether individuals travel abroad when they are young or when they get older. Some people adhere to the idea that people should try it when they are younger, which I concur with it. I believe in this way for two crucial reasons. In the following, I will elucidate my rationale by advancing these two reasons.
The first vital point to be mentioned is that young people should attain innumerable experiences to use them in future stages of their life. Clearly, traveling abroad provides an opportunity for people to broaden their horizon. Therefore, it would be better to travel when you are young. Take my father as a compelling evidence of this reality. My father, when he was in his 20’ had traveled many times to different countries, and he has been in Japan, Sweden, Turkey, and England. As a result, he knows how to communicate with people effectively and efficiently. Had he not been in different countries, he would not have learned how to communicate in proper manners.
Moreover, when people are young, they have more energy to travel, but when they get older, they would prefer to rest in their homes. Obviously, most of the young people admire a hectic life because they are full of energy, so traveling abroad gives them a chance to spend it. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Last year, for summer vacation, I proposed to my family to travel to Italy, but they did not like that because they thought it would be so time and energy consuming. Nevertheless, I was really in to that travel, and full of energy to enjoy the travel. This example demonstrates that when people are young, they will enjoy more from traveling abroad rather than when they are older.
In brief, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that it is better to travel abroad when you are young rather than when you get older. This is because you can attain different experiences for your future, and because young people have more energy to enjoy traveling foreign countries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88802083333 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59132118335 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481770833333 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6192996001 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.85 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293977778218 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975855138501 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124747038492 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21610281965 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1121298416 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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