Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed
people’s lives. • automobiles • bicycles • airplanes Use specific reasons and examples to support
your answer
Transportation is crucial part of our lives and we can not ignore the role of transportation vehicles in our lives. In my point of view, airplanes have changed people lives more than any other type of transportation vehicles for two different reason even though, some people believe that the invention of automobiles was the ground-breaking phenomenon because they were so unique at the time and the ease the people’s lives for the very first time.
First, traveling with airplanes is extremely time-saving action. In the past when people wanted to go to vocation, they have to take a bus and when the distance between their home and their destination was too far they arrived to their destination after couple of days or maybe more than one week. For instance, once I talked to my grandpa and he told me that in his youth he wanted to go to Rome from Milan and that action took 3 days of his time. He told me that he was so exhausted and wished to be home. He did not enjoy his tripe and when he arrived at Rome, he only wanted to get the room in nice hotel and sleep for couple of days. The memory of this trip was in his head and he did not want to go tripe anymore. He also explained that when airplanes invented after couple of years, he went from Rome to Milan in 2 hours plane ride. This reason clearly show us how the invention of airplanes ease the people’s lives.
Second, when you travel by train, you would be more comfortable and relaxed. In comparison to traveling with automobile, when you travel by airplanes you would have more space for yourself and you are going to have better seat and that would turn your whole experience into something wonderful. For instance, I traveled from Lazio to Rome couple of times. One time I traveled with cars and it was simply awful. I was so near to some other passengers and I was under a lot of pressure from some other passenger’s feet. I was fiasco. The other times I take a airplanes, and although it has some other issues but at least I have enough space to read, watching movies, eat and the most important one I could sleep better. I think this example could show how I think that invention of airplanes was amazingly change and make people's lives so much better.
In conclusion, I think among the all kind of transportation vehicles, airplanes make our lives easier and the invention of airplanes was so important because it affect all of our lives and turn our lives into better and joyful adventures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 560, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...t. I was fiasco. The other times I take a airplanes, and although it has some oth...
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Line 3, column 560, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a airplane' or simply 'airplanes'?
Suggestion: a airplane; airplanes
...t. I was fiasco. The other times I take a airplanes, and although it has some other issues ...
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Line 4, column 162, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...f airplanes was so important because it affect all of our lives and turn our lives int...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, as to, at least, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.546875 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62441437679 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457589285714 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.7054539181 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.210526316 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5789473684 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140671521239 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468051975253 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045604896935 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0920736005926 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332100354872 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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