Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny the importance of government decisions. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely state that it is more vital for government to invest some money on Internet access. Even though some people believe that it is better to put that money to improve public transportation, it is my firm belief that Internet access is more necessary. I have two major reasons on this topic, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I think better Internet access is really crucial thing in the modern world. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. For instance, couple of years age, I was working on a tech company. In that time, we tried to sell some of our latest products to some other country. They told us that the only way they could consider to buy our products is that we assure them that we can support our product. We could not support our product without appropriate Internet access. Therefor, we had to cancel our deal with that foreign company. As a result, we could not gain any money and we could not develop our company anymore. I believe this reason could vividly show you how much it is important to improve Internet access in order to help businesses in the current ages.
Finally, I think some businesses could work via Internet and that could prevent government to invest on public transportation. For example, recently, most of the jobs have some sort of relation with the Internet. You can see that many restaurants create some application that could help their costumers to buy over Internet. In my town there is a really good pizza place which name is pizza town. I used to go there to order my food but now I can order by using my personal computer at home. In this way I would not need to go there and I can save some time to rest and study my lessons. In my point of view, examples like this could illustrate why is important to improve Internet access in the modern days.
In the light of above mentioned reasons, I believe that the priority of government should be to invest more money on Internet action instead of improving public transportation. I provide some critical reasons on this topic which are the need of Internet in modern businesses and using Internet in businesses to decrease the transportation of people in order to clarify my assertion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 393, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider buying'.
Suggestion: consider buying
...ey told us that the only way they could consider to buy our products is that we assure them tha...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nternet access in the modern days. In the light of above mentioned reasons, I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, really, so, for example, for instance, i think, sort of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66352941176 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62508948603 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477647058824 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8918644095 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0909090909 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3181818182 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250020894804 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795074619311 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701779819255 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182713880137 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516812669813 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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