A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environmet. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Numerous fields need the financial support of the government, however the biggest concers is our environment which has been deteriorated with the time. In the following essay I will provide some supporting explanation on my decision.
First of all, the environment includes all greeneries, flowers and animals which surrounded us and play crucial role in our health. No one can deny that trees and shrubs clear up the contaminated air above us by using their leaves. Noxious particles and fumes along with greenhouse gases have been emitted from manufactories and cause severe health issues to all people. However, with the help of our environment there is a considerable reduction of these hazardous elements because tree leaves absord CO2. The government should provide financial support for expanding greeneries within a city in order to not stop production and daily routine of factories but to ramp down the emissons. I remember six yeas ago in my country, there was an European Green program which provided some money for all countries within the union and these money intended to be used for enviromental amelioration. As a matter of fact, my city enlarged its green belt and copious parks were built up. As a result, residents started to visit and spend time walking through each park.
Furthermore, if the govenrment helps arts it will definitely concentrate solely in a particular area and that in turn would be supportive for a certain aspect. There is no shortage of opinion that the interest of art is limited, especially in my home country and just these who are interested in, will benefit from that. Accordingly, when the government spend essential money only for art oriented people, it will be in financial deficit and deadlock and would be unable to cover other sector's needs. I remeber, when I was at a high school and government provided a scintilla of money to artisans in order to espouse their activity. In fact, a week later the government decided to cut off from people's pensions and all elderly were on stake because if the inability to subsist. If the govenrment had not given money to support artisans, many retired people would not have complained rioted.
In conclusion, I believe that financial support for environmetn is more adequate action compare to helping arts. It is because environment concerns all of us regardless our occupation, but arts is only a small diapason of fans.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Line 2, column 829, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'these moneys', 'these monies'?
Suggestion: this money; these moneys; these monies
... for all countries within the union and these money intended to be used for enviromental am...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, in conclusion, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02992518703 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80625869112 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588528678304 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2247473816 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.055555556 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129289465794 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040550976318 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353689449674 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869417233611 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229122505614 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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