Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Although, the idea of television advertising has positive impact on adults by promoting numerous newly appeared and exclusive items, it often has adverse effect on children. It should not be directed toward kids and I will explain why I feel this way in the following essay.
First of all, children in age between 2 and 5 years don't have notion about what products are shown on TV and what purpose they serve. Advertising will more likely disrupt their vulnerable psychic and make them discombobulated. Consequently, children can not focus on essential things like talking, exploring human's speech and grasping. No one can deny that their weak conscience might be washed if they stare at commercial breaks. For example, my cousin's kid who has 3 years old tries to come up with first word and that recently is his objective. However, when there are TV advertisings of many products like detergent for wash, kitchen utilities and so on, they cause enormous distortion on him and decelerate the process. Copious industries use extremely creative and refreshing ways to advertise their items which might consist of some vivid colors or animation characters. This in turn, have notorious effect on every kid when watch continuously.
In addition, children are inclined to repeat whatever adults do and copy their activities or habits. Accordingly, they would see what is running on TV and remember it visually. Later, when mature they would watch all advertisings on each channel due to the rooted habit form adults. Some people might say that is not awry and doesn't have negative impact on them. However, every advertising has solely purpose to urge a person to spend money on products and if a child grows with generosity and trustfulness, that would probably thrust him to make tons of purchases. Hence, there is a chance to turn into pathology and be trapped in financial deadlock. My friend's kid is 6 years old and every time when they go shopping he wants to get a specific type of candy which he saw on TV commercial. If he continuous to watch advertisings, he would later buy many different things which might be unnecessary.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that advertisings should not be directed toward kids in early age and there are more drawbacks than advantages. Children in that age have too weak conscience and don't often realize what they see, as they get easily distracted. Also, advertising might turn to be bad habit in later stage, which would encourage people to buy more and spend more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, consequently, first, hence, however, if, so, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95260663507 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75646508651 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5663507109 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3141416541 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5238095238 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174763425208 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516163979576 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553013785582 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131688119527 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588975924013 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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