Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance( for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion
Numerous people are inveigled by variety of sports, theaters or other activities either to watch them or get involved into. If I were asked to choose, I would definitely prefer to affiliate and attend a particular live performance instead of just watching it. I will explain why in the following essay.
First of all, if we take the initiative or opportunity by some chance to attend a performance we might boost our adrenalin and feel special because of the audience that will watch us. Consequently, we can nourish our ego, self-esteem and show to manifold people our abilities and qualities we possess with. This in turn, might play imperative role in our future performances and potential to become a famous person. No one can deny that pressure on stage is considerable no matter what kind of field we play in, due to the fact that hundreds of individuals stare at us and scrutiny each movement. If we do everything smoothly and perfectly, we would feel successful and everyone will greet us. However, if things go in haywire, we would undoubtedly feel lugubrious because of failure. For example, when I was at high school I attended martial art, called "karate". After one year trainings my supervisor invited me for a first national competition. Until that moment I had only watched how others fought. In fact, I wanted to give a try and applied for that. In the day of competition, I stepped on a stage and hundreds of people were watching at me and I can't describe the adrenalin and emotion I had. Interestingly, when I started to attend copious others competitions each years almost all knew my name and I became sort of famous in karate within all national competitions.
In addition, when we attend any kind of performance we have a great chance to gain benefit. There is no shortage of opinion that everyone has given money or other remunerations for his performance. Accordingly, this is a perfect way to make additional income and help yourself financially. For example, a friend of my dad has joined the local theater. He mentioned that in every play, he has given noteworthy amount of money. As a matter of fact, he has his own business, however that is a way to earns something on a side without engaging every day.
In conclusion, I believe that is better to involve yourself into any performance and there are multitudinous advantages. We can become renown people in a certain field by showing our qualities and ramping up the hormone, called adrenalin. Also, that might be source of passive income.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, consequently, first, however, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, sort of, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83640552995 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96730987638 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557603686636 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4361077849 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4583333333 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0833333333 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103155283902 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0291201273782 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0226531092443 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0618962500969 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294608096033 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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