Some people think that parents should plan their children’s leisure time carefully. Other people believe? those children should decide for themselves how to spend their free time, Which idea do you agree with? Give reasons for your choice.
Every child needs some time for relax after the considerable amount on homework or other assignments. It is scientifically proved that leisure activities are beneficial for youngsters and often have positive effects. In my opinion, parents should plan their children's leisure time, rather than children by themselves and I will explain why in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, children are driven by their emotions readily and there are chances in which they can indulge profoundly in a particular entertainment and forget about some essential things. Consequently, they would become more lazy and tedious when they have to go back on duty. No one can deny that, children like to do things which give them profound pleasure and stave off activities such as helping adults and studying. My cousin's toddler for example, loves to play on the play station at home. However, when it come time to do homework he gets irritated and annoyed. Since, he spend enormous amount of time playing games during break times, my cousin's wife imposed some restrictions on his leisure time as he can play games solely 30 minutes during breaks. In this way, he learns how to manage his time productively. If my cousin's wife had not confined the time for playing, he would have stayed in front of the play station for copious hours.
In addition, it is critically important for parents to regulate their children's leisure time and take control over their covets, because kids in a certain age tend to be naughty. Accordingly, they would set off to behave badly and turn into running wild without showing any deference toward their parents. Therefore, parents should act with dominance and not allowing them to do whatever children want. There is no shortage of opinion that if youngsters are allowed to do anything, they will accustom with that and in later stage they would continue doing so. My friend's kid is perfect example of running wild. Because, his parents allow him numerous things, he is 14 years old and every day goes to play billiard with fellows without any care about household chores or school projects. If his parents had not been so mild with him, he would have not lose his valuable time at billiard saloon, playing all day.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that parents should organize their children's leisure time in order to avoid problem later. It is because kid are vulnerable to temptations and once starting leisure activities, they would be unable to stop. Also, parents must show dominance and grow their children with obedient manner. That can happen if they show dominance and astringency.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 517, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
... play station at home. However, when it come time to do homework he gets irritated a...
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Line 2, column 583, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
...e gets irritated and annoyed. Since, he spend enormous amount of time playing games d...
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Line 3, column 852, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'lost'.
Suggestion: lost
...een so mild with him, he would have not lose his valuable time at billiard saloon, p...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, consequently, however, if, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99311926606 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57226483407 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561926605505 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4989304678 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9545454545 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334067892798 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984176343439 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824054855218 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228110918315 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514666126328 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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