Nowadays, parents worldwide are concerned about their children's future seeing that the world is intricate, developed, and competitive. They are concerned about their children's leisure. Although the children are individuals who should be able to decide about their free time, I suppose that parents can lead them to the best selections. There are several reasons why I feel like this, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the form of connectedness and entertainment has been changed, types of equipment are more accessible, and millions of people worldwide are involved in social media. I am of the opinion that, in this situation, children should be led to have more efficient leisure. Otherwise, children will waste precious time without conspicuous achievements. My personal experience is one of the compelling examples of this. My sister spends her time on the internet and social media while she should locate her abilities in her leisure time.
Secondly, children are not mature enough or are not intellectually developed enough to make the decisions that are best for them, so by determining children's talents, parents should provide a suitable plan and social interaction that will allow the children involved to be professional and competitive their future jobs.
For instance, my nephew has a good program that helps him determine his ability, including music, game, and creativity. He has field trips with his friends to improve his social interaction.
The last point but not the least is that every chance will occur one time. As the Iranian saying goes, under no circumstance should you miss your chance; therefore, If parents are not cautious, their children's chances will be missed. Sometimes there are opportunities that children are not conscious and the parents should detect and catch them. For example, son one of my friends has a good talent in the sport. One of the best football teams offered him to join their team, but he refused it because he wanted to spend more time with computer games and missed up on one of the good chances.
In a nutshell, in my opinion, parents should lead their children in leisure time, but it does not mean that they should be selecting their children's aims. On the other hand, they should let them have different experiences and do not weaken their children's self- steam and capacity to imagine.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, i suppose, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09974424552 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70816094432 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542199488491 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5998637812 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.947368421 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5789473684 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399795230372 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11594843183 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866754865714 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20104674076 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0938049706941 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Nowadays, parents worldwide are concerned about th...
^^
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in the following essay. First of all, the form of connectedness and entertainm...
^^
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lities in her leisure time. Secondly, children are not mature enough or are no...
^^
Line 6, column 127, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'fielded'.
Suggestion: fielded
...ing music, game, and creativity. He has field trips with his friends to improve his s...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, i suppose, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09974424552 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70816094432 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542199488491 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5998637812 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.947368421 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5789473684 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399795230372 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11594843183 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866754865714 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20104674076 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0938049706941 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.