Some people think that parents should plan their children’s leisure time carefully. Other people believe? Those children should decide for themselves how to spend their free time, which idea do you agree with?
Nowadays, deciding to have children and raising them properly is becoming a significant issue. Some parents think that they have an obligation to do something in any of their child’s nurturing steps. This is gradually gaining more attention because sometimes parents decide about every aspect of their children like their leisure time which I am absolutely against any of the parents’ involvement due to many reasons.
First, parents’ interference about their children free time is doing to kill the sense of joy and interest in them. They feel that they are having no control over anything in their lives. So, they react impulsively to the other works their mothers or fathers expect them to fulfill. Because, they watch that every action is being forced to them and this will leads to their resist against their parents will consequently. I strongly believe that young people must be set free to decide for themselves. They should be taught to pursue their dreams and joys under their parents’ observation. This prepares them properly for their bright future which they wish to have.
Secondly, letting children to choose their interests and manage their own free times is a step toward responsibility. Since, young people make their mistakes unintentionally when they are doing something that they like. If parents dictate every move and decision of their children, they will accept no responsibility for them. They chiefly persuade their parents that it is the choice that they made for them and they should accept its consequences accordingly. However, children tend to do no mistakes in the actions and assignments that they love to perform.
In conclusion, parents must give some space for their children to do whatever they desire. This will show them that they can follow their dreams. On the other side, it gives the parents a good chance to ask them about their actions and make them responsible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
...n is being forced to them and this will leads to their resist against their parents w...
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Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... times is a step toward responsibility. Since, young people make their mistakes unint...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16878980892 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7062363086 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525477707006 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9705784628 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1666666667 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4444444444 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34314211032 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134972956207 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645229237241 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244570207777 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427358823179 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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