Nowadays, an intricate, developed, and competitive world leads people to spend more time working to achieve more money and mundane matters. At the same time, the upbringing issue is not as precious as before. With this in mind, I strictly agree with this sentence because of the reasons below.
First of all, upbringing methods have been changed. Setting rules by parents are less unlike past, and they try to do like a friend to their children instead of parents. This idea has pros and cons. the merit side of this thinking is that children speak about their problems with their parents easily, but the demerit is that children cannot understand the adult's status. So they do not respect their teacher or parent as in the previous generation, and they fall out with their teacher. For instance, my brother has a boy. he always thinks that parents should not advise children and setting rules by parents is not valid, and now my nephew speaks with his teacher out of rude and his manner has gone beyond control.
The second point is that the internet is an inseparable part of children's lives nowadays. Although the internet has different advantages like ease of working, there are also distinct disadvantages. In this way, children spend much time on the internet, so; they cannot experience real connectedness, so empathy and altruism will be destroyed. Internet leads children to be aggressive and depressed and exposes them to mental suffering. Accordingly, they usually do not care about the ethical issue and do not respect as the children in the past did. For instance, I spent more time in the actual arena in the past, and connectedness with other people was easier for me, but now I spend more time on the internet, which has caused me to be more depressed and aggressive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'systems'' or 'system's'?
Suggestion: systems'; system's
... These rules determine each part of the systems duty and increase their contribution, a...
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Line 7, column 118, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('contrariwise') instead an adjective, or a noun ('effect') instead of another adjective.
...r upbringing, but strict rules may have a contrariwise effect on their soul. Strict rules cause dista...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, for example, for instance, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87925696594 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54065846053 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504643962848 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1595108494 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1875 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251146906533 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901027316151 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655047290073 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173577879302 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543174618316 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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