Almost always construction assumes as an improvement in societies; however, it has both positive and negative aspects. On the one hand it could create job opportunities for locals and improve the states of people there; on the other hand, it could increase crowd and traffic and its subsequent problems. In my opinion, the benefits from a new factory in my hometown are much more notable. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the most considerable issue these days is obtaining a job. We all know people, who are migrated to other cities to find a job, as there was not any suitable one in their hometowns. A new factory could deter them to leave their family and friends just to find a job. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I am from a small village far away from Tehran (the capital of Iran). We have nothing to do there, other than fishing and farming. I studied business administration, and I wouldn't have come to Tehran in order to find a job if I had a relevant job there.
In addition to job opportunities, a new factory would improve the reputation of a city. What I mean is others might see the name of the city more than before, which is conducive to improvement of confident in locals. For instance, about one year ago, Samsung established a factory in our village; this fact became widespread in news, and caused the fact that others know more about us. As a result, i don't need to explain the location and situation of there when others asking about my origin. I feel more comfortable now.
In conclusion, despite some drawbacks of building a new factory in a city, the advantages are more. That is because it would bring job opportunities there, and because it would improve the states of locals more than before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: wouldn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, for instance, i feel, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1488.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60681114551 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6935589474 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554179566563 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4667966491 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6666666667 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9444444444 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0893102283505 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322615362596 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435035385838 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0602235586403 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178266927318 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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