A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. do you support or oppose the factory?
The community we live is an important part of our life. We spend most of our time and years of our life in this place. Definitely, some people if asked would agree with the statement that it is great for our community to build a large factory while others will have a negative attitude. In my opinion, building a new factory has great advantages for our community that outweigh in comparing its disadvantages. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on arguments to supporting my views.
The main reason is that the establishment of a factory creates the job. For a constructed factory, they need to hire some workers, architects, engineers and so on. As a consequence, the rate of unemployment decreases significantly. To illustrate that idea let’s consider the following example. I remember 3 years ago a large factory advertised in the newspapers for hiring many workers. Many of people including my brother as architecture enrolled in job positions and most of them get a job according to their resume. After the building of factory completed, they requested for permanent workers in the factory with a good salary, as a result, many of people occupied again. As you see, they increased the rate of employment people. This brought with itself reducing the crime rate, addiction and other problems that caused by unemployment.
Additionally, a new factory will bring prosperity to our community. The taxes that factory must pay, increase the revenue of our community. This income can use for the improvement of infrastructures and other developments. Also, incomes of people boost and they will more affordable to buy more clothes, more foods, more furniture and everything they want. In general, the income of all people in the community will better. In contrast, some people oppose to build a new factory because they think this factory will pollute our air and water but with new technology that emits a minimum of pollution to our environment, we shouldn’t worry about pollution anymore. Also, they are concern about the structure of social our community, however, we cannot stay in an old shape we need evolve and increase our tolerant to new aspects of our life.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments above, despite some drawbacks, I am of the opinion that founding new factory would many benefits to our community.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y would many benefits to our community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, while, in contrast, in general, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02557544757 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95403837331 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519181585678 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.5166751601 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3181818182 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7727272727 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19988385157 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631970046001 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624040394007 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127780676373 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0192531885509 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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