A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position
The construction of a large factory in a first viewpoint, reveals some advantages such as job opportunities for juveniles, providing welfare and community development. By a profound contemplation, the probability of environmental pollution accompanying all industries, people migration and limitation of recreational places spark some future concerns. There is perhaps more than anything else, an argument between environmentalist and government to select an appropriate area for factories establishment. To elaborate more on the advantages and disadvantages of building a factory near a community, the following analytical reasons and examples will be presented.
The most important advantage of a large factory construction is the employment proliferation. A large factory needs lots of jobs’ categories. From initial steps embarking on by civil activities till final steps terminating by delivering the products and services to customers, a deluge of experts can be recruited. Even in special situations, the human sources of a community is not sufficient and the trustees of the factory have to invite experts from other communities. Qatar is a good example of a country, giving a huge source of petroleum and the workers are provided from other countries. Needless to say, the presence of large factories decreases the rate of unemployment on and brings about welfare for public of community as well. In addition, this matter plays a critical role about the future concerns of next generation prosperity. These advantages are main motivations accelerating factories building.
In spite of the mentioned advantages, establishment of all factories jeopardizes surrounded environment due to the encroaching to the natural area. It goes without saying, the living places of wild animals will be demarcated and some food chains can be cut away. It is also worthwhile noting the side valueless products of factories such as their produced wastewater, emitted hazardous gases, remnant of their obsolete equipment are usually released into environment. They remain for decades and can be recognized as chief cause of wild animals’ death. This crucial disadvantage is strongly rebuked by environmentalists.
Another disadvantage of building a factory can be referred to some social problems originating by migration of people from other communities. The culture of the community sustaining by indigenous people can be changed remarkably. The emergence of factory's workers with different cultures diminishes the original culture and a community with various psychological behaviors will be formed. As the current social findings reveal. the rate of violent behaviors in these communities in much higher than other communities. There are lots of industrial cities in the world that the number of reports concerning crime occurrence is more than what the specialists anticipate.
To recapitulate, construction of a factory proffers some advantages and disadvantages as well. The vital role of feasibility study to clarify the current and future conditions of community with the presence of a large factory should be considerably considered. To my best knowledge, the benefits of both sides i.e. the people who take attention to community welfare and the ones take care of environment withstanding should be provided.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, well, while, in addition, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 8.0752688172 334% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2830.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68273092369 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3478996583 2.67179642975 125% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530120481928 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 914.4 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 16.0 3.08781362007 518% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7807204062 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.846153846 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1538461538 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.57692307692 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215947480803 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655105226694 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052667231898 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127999656163 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397369875449 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 10.9000537634 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 86.8835125448 185% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.