You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is the one thing you will do to improve your community? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
Considering the subject that I want to do for improving my community, I strongly incline to teach some people principles and related experiences associated with social life. As I passed some related courses focused of this subject as well as I have lots of studies in the connected area, I highly tend to transfer my knowledge about social behaviors to other member of my community. To elaborate more on the importance of teaching the principle of social behaviors, the following reasons and examples will be presented.
First and foremost, the enhanced community is highly likely related to the behaviors of community's members. All communities compose of some groups of people which in addition to their activities and professions, their social behaviors immensely affect the whole community. Being the one of the most proliferated known social issue in all communities, the critical role of the social education cannot be neglected. In addition, the current social and psychological studies endorse that education of social behavior plays a key role in the reputation of all communities. As a matter of fact, all communities are founded on their social principles. As everyone knows, a lot of prehistoric excavated letters revealed, the primary principles of great civilizations such as Egypt, Roman, etc were based on their social rules. Scarcely had they ignored the approved rules when it come to the living socially. It goes without saying, the loyalty to the social rules requires the strong, incessant and professional educations. Therefore, As a member of community, I would like to be candidate for teaching the social behaviors.
Aside from the points I made above, although there are lots of disciplines that I can teach to other members, the importance of none of them can be implied as substantial subject as the social behaviors. For instance, if a member does not know how behave with others respectfully, how communicate with others effectively and how treat their kids logically, learning other stuffs can be attributed as the time wasting. Needless to say, the security of my community is tightly associated with the knowledge of community members considering the social behaviors. There are lots of evidences that prove in the well-educated community, the probability of crime is much lower compared with other communities.
To recapitulate, I cannot agree more about the importance of teaching social behaviors compared with doing other things as my critical role for improvement of my community regarding the community reputation, the necessity of the social behaviors in all disciplines and the security of my community. To my best knowledge, even though I strongly do everything to cover this subject, the crucial role of the government to support this program is remarkable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 874, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
...they ignored the approved rules when it come to the living socially. It goes without...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2363.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29820627803 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04678491345 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482062780269 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3058727199 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.277777778 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7777777778 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0754086650272 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0297854467638 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322388143244 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0540134831296 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184663708682 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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