If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
Regarding the topic asked in the question, among different critical issues related to the hometown development, I would select an accurate, organized and future perspective plan to solve the traffic problem. As current social and civil engineering findings reveal the traffic is a chief cause of air pollution, squandering time and energy, and psychological problems by a decrease in the level of toleration in hometown's habitants. In addition, the growth of population brings about a situation to signify an investment in traffic plans of a city as long-term perspective. To elaborate more on the topic mentioned, the following analytical reasons and examples will be presented.
First and foremost, air pollution is most critical factor originated from a simple traffic in a city in which a turbulence in distribution of transportation system has occurred. In that situation, for instance, a deluge of automobiles stops in a highway and a huge volume of pollutants specially carbon dioxide is produced. If the level of hazardous materials emission approaches critical values, the most public and private activities in the city should be terminated and that imposes a remarkable expense to the government and people as well. Moreover, the life of other living beings particularly birds and wild mammals might be jeopardized. Chinese cities are good examples of area conflicting incessantly with air pollution associated with traffic problems. As a result, providing a significant change in city's traffic to manage it perfectly well, absolutely compensates these losses.
Another primary motivation to change traffic plans as a most important thing about my hometown is the reduction of fossil fuel consumption. As all transportation engineering findings reveal, in a traffic jam the fuel consumption of all automobiles increases at least two-fold compared to the normal conditions. Considering the huge expenses in fossil fuel exploitation and the critical competition among powerful countries in proving petroleum sources, solving traffic problems bring about a security in energy sources for current and next generations. Besides, the noticeable reduction in time of people who spend in traffic jam will be occurred. These advantages accelerate my hometown development when it comes to solving traffic problems.
To recapitulate, solving traffic problems by roads extension, population control, public transportation system development definitely eliminates lots of city's problems. A decrease in pollutant emission and fossil fuel consumption are first advantages of change in traffic plan and beyond those, numerous benefits will be indirectly achieved. To my best knowledge, solving some psychological diseases originated from noise pollution and uncontrol behaviors in traffic jam will be solved.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'simple traffic'.
Suggestion: simple traffic
...is most critical factor originated from a simple traffic in a city in which a turbulence in dist...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'materials'' or 'material's'?
Suggestion: materials'; material's
... is produced. If the level of hazardous materials emission approaches critical values, th...
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Line 7, column 46, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'roads'' or 'road's'?
Suggestion: roads'; road's
...capitulate, solving traffic problems by roads extension, population control, public t...
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Line 7, column 488, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ehaviors in traffic jam will be solved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, well, at least, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 43.0788530466 26% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 8.0752688172 372% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71599045346 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19933719875 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534606205251 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7700572335 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.055555556 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2777777778 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0766163574097 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286168720118 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415828439853 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0501483458196 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241246018156 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 58.1214874552 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 10.9000537634 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.05 8.01818996416 125% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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