If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would
you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
Changes in city communities are necessary to improve the standards of people`s lives. Thus, if I had a chance to make one change to my city, I would definitely decrease public transportation fees. Specifically, I would propose to finance these fees directly from the federal government.
First, students do not have money to pay for public transport service. Students have low incomes to the extent that some of them cannot allow to buy clothing. A couple days ago I came across one article written by Michael Kavinskii and published on www.browser.com in December, 2020, which discusses the issue related to financial expenses of Alabama university attenders. The author says that 87 percent of Alabama students claim that a rise in transportation fees has become a burden to a monthly budget. The money spent on transportation converted to a real obstacle for most of learners of educational institutes. This article clearly states the reasonability in attending to the transportation fees charged from students.
Second, a lot of families cannot afford paying for high transportation charges looking for a nearby school for their children. Parents of average income in my city cannot afford a number of financial luxuries, including public transport services. Their reasons are explicitly stated in the statistics provided by Levada`s Moscow Research Institute in 2019. The findings demonstrate that 75.5 percent of respondents admit having asked for a financial support from local municipalities to cover public transport expenses related to school children, 20.5 percent of parents said they have had to relocate their children, and 4 percent of adults registered insignificant financial costs for their children attributed to municipality`s buses usage. The established statistics proves that some adults disapprove of financial expenses related to public transportation. It is explicit that forerunners will be at least for decreasing the costs of public transport for their family`s budget.
Finally, municipalities suffer from free-riders, the number of whom increased due to a rise in current fees of common transport. Most students and even employees easily use public transport, as the paying process is not controlled. Passengers are expected to pay with a transportation card touching the surface of an automated control device installed near the doors of a public transport vehicle. Because the paying process is not controlled , people use the opportunity to skip the pay for a bus. A month ago I watched an episode “Free family” from a British-production movie anthology “Black Mirrors”. Beside the main line of information technologies issue, the protagonist, a thirty-year-old young man, Tom, makes his best to bring home the bacon. In order to cut increased expenses, he does not pay for a bus using it for free. Besides, the condition of transportation vehicles showed is far from appealing. It is clear that money gathered from public transport users is not sufficient for covering maintenance needs. The episode shows that transportation fees of public transport is no use, because people, who use it free, will find the ways to continue doing it that results to the absence of funds needed for public transportation.
To sum up, making public transportation vehicles for free will improve the life standards of students, parents, and also condition of local budget. Thus, I believe that the decision to finance the costs of public transport tickets is one of relevant changes to implement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 142, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'buying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: buying
...e extent that some of them cannot allow to buy clothing. A couple days ago I came acro...
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Line 2, column 145, Rule ID: BUY_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'by'?
Suggestion: by
...xtent that some of them cannot allow to buy clothing. A couple days ago I came acro...
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Line 2, column 268, Rule ID: COMMA_MONTH_DATE[1]
Message: The comma is probably incorrect: 'December 2020'.
Suggestion: December 2020
...kii and published on www.browser.com in December, 2020, which discusses the issue related to f...
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Line 2, column 574, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the learners') or simply say ''most learners''.
Suggestion: most of the learners; most learners
...tation converted to a real obstacle for most of learners of educational institutes. This article...
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Line 3, column 41, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to pay'.
Suggestion: to pay
...Second, a lot of families cannot afford paying for high transportation charges looking...
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Line 4, column 442, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...use the paying process is not controlled , people use the opportunity to skip the ...
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Line 4, column 1124, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'frees'?
Suggestion: frees
...t is no use, because people, who use it free, will find the ways to continue doing i...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, look, second, so, thus, at least, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2995.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 552.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42572463768 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25206219066 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528985507246 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 912.6 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6221950644 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.925925926 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07407407407 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0536105524774 0.236089414692 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0197664646134 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303816511935 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.048808875185 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427444272067 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 86.8835125448 181% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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