If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
In every home town there are both sides of town good and bad. Some people are inclined toward the attitude that town always need some transformation, whereas others hold different perspective. I personally, though, believe that my town needs to change because there is no town or city which is perfect. In the following essay, I intend to put forth my points and reasons of support.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that, many companies establish factories near the housing society and this is the worst part because it effects the health of my hometown people. For example, I do remember when I was young there was a manufacturing factory just two blocks away from my house. The waste of factories is very dangerous, as it produces fumes which are lethal to human health and create air pollution. One of my friend had asthma and later it switched to severe from mild and she suffered. Thus, this example elucidates that government should take action against it.
Secondly, in my village there is only one park for whole town so at the evening time there is no place to even put foot inside the park. The parks are the spot to take some rest or relax, not to give yourself a mental torture. For instance, the government should make parks for each community so the children can play in a peace ful environment or elder citizens can take fresh air.
Finally, the parking areas outside the mall or reasturants are not proper which results in the traffic jam. This is the something that people can do it by themselves but unfortunately our people are so stubborn.
To wrap up, I believe that these are the easy changes that can be done and are essential for the better life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ned toward the attitude that town always need some transformation, whereas others...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65217391304 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49985626146 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602006688963 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8359684773 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7333333333 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0553497943431 0.236089414692 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0192345421929 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0241437218953 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0304568708702 0.150856017488 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022273546159 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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