If you could change one important thing about your hometown what would you change Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

I hail from a small town in Osun state, Nigeria. The town is located in the rural part of the state but the electricity and water supply is much better than what one would expect in such a rural community. The atmosphere in the town is also calmer and more salubrious compare to bigger towns in the state and this makes it a near perfect place to be. However, the one thing I would change about the town, if I had the capability to do so, is its size. The size of the town is very smaller than that of most of neighbouring towns, and commercial activities in my hometown is not as robust as I would have loved as a result.
This small size has also stripped the town of the opportunity to house important institutions and facilities, foe example, universities, polytechnics and probably a football pitch. The likelihood of such major project in the town is also infinitesimally small, and that may make it difficult for my hometown to compete with its neighbours in all ramifications. For example, a new college of education has been approved to be built in one of the bigger surrounding towns (the size of the town was one of the deciding factor) and that would undeniably increase the commercial activities in that town, and also improve its status amongst the surrounding towns.
In conclusion, if there is anything that I would love to change about my beautiful hometown, it would be its size because I believe a bigger size would make it attract more commercial activities, institutions and subsequently improve its status among other towns in the state.

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also, but, however, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1287.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 275.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84500780693 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490909090909 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 416.7 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.5847312448 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.0 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5555555556 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118798708018 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600453455975 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612691355721 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962967202906 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329523533024 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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