If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
Hometown is the place that always will be remembered in our hearts. Everyone wants to help the people of their hometown by doing some or other good deeds. Unfortunately, most people will not get the opportunity to do that. I personally believe, If I could change one thing about my hometown I would change the local leader who is very awful. I feel this way for three reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, our local leader has made many promises before the elections, and when he won he failed to keep up those promises. He never ever bothered about what he told before the elections. Sadly, some people couldn’t realize his true behavior and still supporting him. For example, the leader has promised to donate free land for housing to the impoverished, and now that after winning the election he is collecting money from people give them land. Though people are questioning him of that, he established a dictatorship in our hometown. This shows how cunning and unreliable he is.
Second, the local leader has no empathy for the people. A true leader needs to show empathy towards his fellow people and this will form an affection between them. On the other hand, the leader in our town is like a two-faced coin, on one face he managed to show off his gentle behavior, and on the other face, he is brutal. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. During the last year’s summer, a house in my colony got fire and was turned down to ashes. The people of the house had nowhere to go and visited the leader’s house seeking help. The local leader had thrown them out of his house. He acted in such a pathetic way.
Finally, he has been consuming the funds released by the government since he was elected. The poor people of my town are turning into the poorest while the fortune of the president is growing like anything. For instance, when the state government had announced plans to develop the towns of our state and released lots of funds, all the towns received those funds and are now in better condition than before. But out town is not at all developed and all those funds have simply gone into the president’s pocket.
In conclusion, I would change the local leader of our hometown if I got the opportunity to. This is because he made fake promises, he has no empathy towards others and it is sure that the town is not able to develop under his rule.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'will' and 'be'.
Suggestion: will always be
Hometown is the place that always will be remembered in our hearts. Everyone want...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, still, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57736720554 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4471195283 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528868360277 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9897548175 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.28 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.32 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0871430861262 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0293284146684 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643960932821 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.062761897409 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065819176794 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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