A company wants to use money to help employees work better. One way is to improve the technology equipment (computer, printer) used by employees and improve efficiency. Another way is to redesign the space to make the working environment more comfortable and have more meeting room for discussion. Which way do you recommend? Why?
In each company, one of the essential strategies in management is the continuous evaluation of employee's comfort in the workplace. The vitality of this matter is as much as that company devotes some portion of their annual income to enhance the conditions of their staff. In this order always there is an argument in the allocation of money to improve the employee's condition. One side believes that money should invest on the extent of technological equipment while the other side persists in redecorating and redesigning of the workplace in order to have a better space in interior decoration and structure of place to relax or have discussions. I'm on the belief its better spend money on facilitating the company with modern equipment and tools.
The first reason that I stand for is that technology would help employee more than any factor. A company with a lot of modern technological tools such as professional computers, printers, etc. will facilitate the procedure in the company as easy as possible, and as the conditions of employee get better, their satisfaction will be improved.
Secondly, using modern technological equipment would help the company to do works at high speed and more precisely and also save in time and money. Application of advanced tools in addition to assisting the accuracy and precision of projects will improve the quality of the projects, which may lead to making an excellent reputation for the company. By this, the company would receive more projects both in frequency and value of contracts. In business, the more projects you get, the more money you earn.
As a conclusion, what was previously said, with regards to the vast potential of technology, providing advanced technological tools will improve the performance and satisfaction of personnel. I think doing more projects in a well-equipped medium would expose the company to a high order chance for earning more money. Possibly a portion of this extra income could be invested and distributed in enhancing the conditions of the company in other aspects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... of place to relax or have discussions. Im on the belief its better spend money on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, i think, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13731343284 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96105259653 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6960441148 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.733333333 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296247262795 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927127354775 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529861755795 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170565950984 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395094781843 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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