Nowadays, we live in contemporary societies that have experienced many scientific advances, which provides us opportunities to improve our working places and living environments, so it has made it possible to conduct different practical approaches in order to assist workers to work more efficiently. An inevitable question which has always been the topic of contention and brought about heated debates is whether enhancing technology tools is better to help employees work effectively or providing a more comfortable environment with meeting rooms for discussion. A plethora of people adheres to the belief that improving the technology equipment is the most efficacious way to help workers, which I entirely concur with. In the following, I will explicitly elucidate my rationale by advancing two reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that improving equipment boosts employee’s performance because working with old and outdated devices is extremely frustrating and overwhelming. Apparently, antiquated equipment have many defects, which causes people to get furious, so people who are operating this kind of devices are more exposed to mental problems. Therefore, thanks to the new technology people will have an opportunity to work in an environment which has less pressure and stress. My own experience is a compelling evidence of this reality. Two years ago, I was working in a construction company, and we were supposed to draw plans with outdated computers and software, so it made me to hate my job because those devices were working like snails, but after a while, the company bought new computers, which aided its employees’ performances. Had the company not bought new computers, its employees’ performances would not have increased.
Second, providing new technology for employees will add their leisure to time. Obviously, outdated technology is much more slower than cutting-edge technologies. As a result, people who are working in companies, which its devises are old have to work even in weekends. As proof for these points, a recent and comprehensible investigation undertaken by a number of eminent researchers at the University of London demonstrated that people who have occupation in companies like Google, and Microsoft, which have the highest technologies, have more holidays than people who are working in normal companies. This evidence indicates that how new technologies aid staffs to operate smoothly and quickly.
In brief, all aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the conclusion that it is much more thoughtful to provide superior technology equipment for employees in order to help them to work better. This is because not only will boost its employees’ performances but also it will increase their leisure time and holidays.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, in brief, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50580046404 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15913699171 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542923433875 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.6517451853 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.588235294 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3529411765 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260834379387 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853172725425 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576518082536 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171824995173 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437488793954 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 10.002688172 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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