construction in countrysides (attempt 2)
Nowadays, with the population booming, there are not enough spaces for people to live the big city. This trend prompts a controversial topic whether the government should permit people and companies to build the house in the countryside or not. I adamantly believe that there are many advantages in constructing a home in these regions.
Governments cannot turn a blind eye to need of those who are struggling to find an affordable place to live. The growth of population and limitation of space for building houses spark a detrimental issue which is soaring the price of per square meter of homes. Accordingly, people living under poverty line cannot balance their monthly income with cost of living which one prominent part of it is the money they should pay for the renting a home monthly. If governments ignore this issue, the likelihood of spreading homelessness will be a lot. On the other hand, by increasing the number of the house in the countryside, not only government and private sectors provide a place for people to live, but also since the supply of the home increases, the price of the home in the city will be decreased. To illustrate the point, the Daily Mail in 2014 reported that in Tehran, Iran using countrysides decreased the price of the property to the great extent and welfare of people living under poverty line increased.
More important subject to discuss is Traffic jam being one of the biggest problems in any metropolitan cities. From this perspective, if people move to the countryside and the city's population declines, the fewer cars would be available in the city. As a result, fewer people would be stuck in the traffic jam and less Carbon dioxide would be emitted to the environment. Some people might be believed that countryside reconstruction will decrease the green space and it will deteriorate the health of citizens. However, I think it is not necessarily the case; because reducing the toxic emissions by cars can lead the cities to better and healthier environment. As an example, one study done by Yale University showed that Britain government policy in using countrysides for property construction led to the less air pollution in urban areas.
In a nutshell, I believe that governments should allow home construction companies to build homes for people. it would increase the quality of living for people who are in the predicament to find a proper place for themselves and their family. Moreover, it will not only decrease the traffic jam in the city but also is the solution for air pollution.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, moreover, so, i think, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94871794872 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81185556114 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503496503497 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3282048247 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.944444444 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104508594435 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375006609257 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500949976182 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0766321608966 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433484512527 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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