What do you think is the best way for the government of your country to improve the environment?
• Increase public transportation
• Reduce the construction of new factories
• Build more parks
The discussion is about whether or not government of a country may use which methods to improve the environment. Personally, I believe that more public transportations and increasing numbers of parks have great contribution to the environment. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore on my following essay.
To begin with, fast and high number of public transportation such as metro, buses and trains could decrease personal automobile need. Less need to personal cars results reduced numbers of cars in the road, therefore, this cause to less pollution, as well. For instance, one personal vehicle could be used usually one or two people. However, albeit slightly high size of the public transportation automobiles, they could be utilize 40 people, sometimes even more, approximately. In addition to this, traffic rate may decrease dramaticly due to less vehicle and it would make travel faster, as well. That is why, if the government increases the number of these transportation vehicles, they could prevent releasing of huge rates of carbon dioxid and other harmful gases to the atmosphere. With this approach, they may protect ozone layer, if a lot of countries apply this policy in their own country, this may also decrease climate change speed and global heating process.
Secondly, building more parks and more green places in the country decrease carbon dioxid levels, and temperature of regions, beacuse sunlight are not allowed to reaching the road by leaves of trees. Thereby, in the hot summer days, people can walk around comfortable. Hıgh temperature has negative impact on health, especially it is more dangerous for older generation. Cardiac problems are exaggregated by the hot weather. Drawing my own experience, my grandparents were not able to go outside in the summer generally, because of feeling breathless and sweating a lot. Because, the temperature could increase to 40 degrees in Baku, it limits traveling somewhere in middle of the day. Additionally, creating more parks cause to spend more time in outside and decrease rate of sedantary life style too, which contribute human’s health greatly. Therefore, building more parks makes the athmospher cleaner, and region more reliable by decreasing temperature.
In the light of aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that more parks and public transportations are the best ways to build better environment in a country. This is because, less cars lead to decrease pollution rate, more oxigen and less carbon dioxid levels would exist by more parks, which improve environment and health of humans as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30193236715 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91704746416 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562801932367 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7949445397 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241752099145 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734932266359 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697170376397 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169085318729 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555833010295 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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