What do you think is the best way for the government of your country to improve the environment?
Increase public transportation
● Reduce the construction of new factories
● Build more park
Many people agree that everyone in the world should live in a clean and healthy environment. Personally, I think that the government of my country should improve the environment by reducing the construction of new factories. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the ensuing paragraph.
Firstly, factories are a major source of air pollution which can seriously detriment our health. Most factories emit numerous toxic gases that cause respiratory illness to many people who reside near them. My own experience is an illustrative example of this. When I was young, I lived in a small village near Alexandria. It was calm and nature-oriented so I had a lot of time to enjoy the fresh air while playing with my friends outside. However, I had to move to the city for university. The city had many factories that are not so far from the university campus. Thus, every time I went outside with my friends on weekends, I would suffer from cough and feel less energetic. So, I went to the doctor and he informed me that I developed a chronic sore throat that would restrict me from going outside for long periods. Accordingly, the government should repress the construction of new factories.
In addition, building new factories encroaches on beautiful natural landscapes. These landscapes are crucial for our mental well-being. Those are the places where people can take a break from their daily routine and relax for a bit. Damaging nature for the sake of new factories construction will have a negative impact on us. For instance, I used to go to the beach every weekend with my family. It was one of my best memories. We would enjoy the sea breeze and have fun playing racket and volleyball in the fresh air. Meanwhile, when I went to the beach with my friends this time, there were many factories that were so close to the beach. Obviously, there were dark clouds above the beach and invasive fumes smell due to the proximity of these factories to the beach area. Also, We didn’t enjoy our time at all because of the noise coming out from these factories. If the government has limited the construction of new factories, we would have enjoyed our time at the beach.
In conclusion, the government should comprehend that the physical health and mental well-being of people are the main assets of any country. Hence, new guidelines for factories construction should be employed to improve the environment that will eventually reflect on people overall health
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 269, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'factories'' or 'factory's'?
Suggestion: factories'; factory's
...it. Damaging nature for the sake of new factories construction will have a negative impac...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80332409972 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72394541198 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537396121884 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3859655558 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.3913043478 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6956521739 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139469621934 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475236712098 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05089999526 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104071226599 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233228792385 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 269, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'factories'' or 'factory's'?
Suggestion: factories'; factory's
...it. Damaging nature for the sake of new factories construction will have a negative impac...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80332409972 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72394541198 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537396121884 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3859655558 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.3913043478 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6956521739 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139469621934 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475236712098 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05089999526 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104071226599 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233228792385 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.