the extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past
Some may agree that grandparents are less important now than it was in the past. However, I believe that grandparents are the word of wisdom and peace in any family. In the ensuing paragraph, I will further elaborate the rationale behind my opinion.
First, Grandparents lived longer than anyone in the family. That means, they have been through a lot more than any of us and lived many experiences either in their career or in their personal life. This experience is a treasure that every other family member should make a good use of it. Personally, whenever I have a problem that looks impossible to be solved, I go to my grandfather to guide me and let him help me with it. For example, after I finished my high school, I had to go to college. So, I was torn between living in the dorm or living with my parents. So, my grandfather advised me to go through the experience of living on my own for the first semester then decide if I should go on with living alone or go back home to live at my parents’. Clearly, this was the best advice someone has ever gave to me. As you guess, I lived on my own and had a great life experience. Therefore, it is important to listen to our grandparents who are the wisest of all generations.
Moreover, older people are generally calmer and having peaceful life than ours. So, whenever I feel stressed due to family problems or work issues, I pay a visit to my grandparents’. That is because, this is where I had my childhood, when there were no responsibilities and all I have to do was to play and enjoy my time. For instance, last week I had a long tiring week at work. I stayed up late to finish my work everyday and I felt so exhausted that I didn’t want to go to work next week. However, my grandmother called to invite me over and spend the weekend with her. Therefore, I decided to pay a visit to her and surprisingly she made my favorite meal and dessert. Eventually, I felt calm and peaceful enjoying my meal at their house and that made me ready to work with a positive mood on Monday. That is why my grandparents’ role in my life cannot be underestimated.
To sum it up, people don’t have enough time to visit their relatives like in the past. But this doesn’t mean that their impact in our lives became less important. If people involved their grandparents more in their lives, they will realize how much they missed before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'agrees'.
Suggestion: agrees
Some may agree that grandparents are less important no...
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Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ork. I stayed up late to finish my work everyday and I felt so exhausted that I didn’t w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42857142857 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74076971584 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519274376417 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2973864724 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.12 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.64 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135783699976 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510445762176 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929430249004 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1186952769 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949521422299 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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