do u agree or disagree ? advertisings affects people in negative way
Fort he last mid century’s marketing has undergone some drastic changes with effects the life largely. advantages and disadvantages of advertising has been a controversial issue in the community lately. while some people claim that advertising has some significant drawbacks that it constitute a number of undeniable benefits. Although both sides have some several pros and cons, I am of the opinion that advertising effects people behaviors negative way. Advertising increase marketing expenditure people while they needn’t buy it. Other side, When people watch new good’s advertising, they said ‘We have to buy new this one’. I will elucidate the details of my support with some tangible and examples in the following paragraphs.
firstly, advertising sector has increase grow rates that it do doubled last ten years. Many of people have smart technology, so they can connect to internet wherever they want and time. Some firm tend to use advertising technique which has negative affects. People read an article on internet, suddenly an advertising come our monitor that cover all screen. People are exposed to buy it, because it aims to do pressure over the consumers who must feel to buy that products thanks to continually advertising. When people search computer words in google, they enter another site and face to Adsense advertising. This advertising techniques affects people expenditure habits.
Secondly, last year in the internet trading people expenditure 3 billions Dollars related with advertising products. Some science people in Turkey carry out a research affects of advertising in the winter months among Turkish consumers. If Turkish consumers want happy, they especially persuade new advertising buys new clothes, but not require. If they do not buy them, they feel unhappy. Because they could not afford higher cost in order to buy. Moreover, products may be different on the advertising.
To sum up in the global world, we can not hinder advertising negative affects which they have hidden aim on the people. Government pass strict regulation politics regarding advertising which has negative drawbacks. Some precautions may solve the global advertising problem which has negative way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52906976744 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91844250453 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581395348837 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9940374143 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.6956521739 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9565217391 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315022513468 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966685962148 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702682608752 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207336152283 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465154902207 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.2 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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