Do u agree or disagree? People today spend much more time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like rather than doing things they should do.
Over the past few decades, the issue of whether people should spend more time on personal enjoyment activities rather than the obligation activities has received a great deal of attention. Although some may argue that the required activities are necessary for having good future, I as well as many others believe that by doing preference enjoyment activities people can find their talents. I am of the opinion that both of the mentioned viewpoints have their own merits and drawbacks, and the following explanations will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, without a shadow of doubt, interest in every activity is vital. This means that favoring in an activity not only provide the necessitate incentive of the work but also can create innovative situations in each field. In addition, doing personal enjoyment things, people will be able to find their susceptibility. For the purpose of the illustration, I have a cousin who was civil engineering and had a great interest in painting. She took a much time on educating art rather than building construction as her major work. She established an exhibition and famous masters admired her painting works. She could find her talent in art an became a famous artist.
Furthermore, it is established beyond the doubt that diversity is significant for concentration. As a case in point, doing the same work routinely could degrade he ingenuity of people. Some people can regulate their mind during their enjoyable activities. According to a recent research conducted by a Japanese institution, people who spend time on their favorite entertainments among their work demonstrate more success in their job.
The last but not the least reason by which the claim is justified is that in this competitory world, one who has necessary proficiency can achieve more qualified job positions. In other words, the more spending time on obligatory skills, the more success on acquisition a suitable job will be achieved. This axiomatic that spending too much time on enjoyment things leading disruption in learning essential activities.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one can draw the conclusion that spending time for enjoyment activities is substantial. Nonetheless, it should be stressed that this argument does not neglect the importance of spending the time to indispensable works. Finally, it is worth bearing in mind that this is a controversial issue which needs to be further studied so as to provide conclusive results unanimously accepted by all specialists. Therefore, I suggest that more surveys and studies be conducted to enable us to answer this question more precisely.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, as to, in addition, in brief, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32547169811 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0541095985 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537735849057 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2086384642 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.523809524 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1904761905 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61904761905 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222905323311 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614018104605 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638867748149 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120431662068 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032348989469 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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