Today's modern world places a great deal of importance on saving energy. With this in mind, governments' officials and ordinary people often debate whether increasing the price of oil and gas is an effective tool for controlling their consumption or not. I personally of the opinion that this is not a beneficial move for various reasons, two of which I shall touch upon in the following paragraphs to substantiate my perspective.
To begin with, any prohibitive action such as increasing price tend to have negative effect because it does not stem from will of citizen. Nowadays, government enacted numerous prohibitive laws which do not hold the values that they were supposed to. In spite of those laws, People are going to act against those laws to show their oppositions. For example, two years ago, Iranian government passed a law which prohibits individuals to walk their dogs in beach. After two years, there are more and more people taking their dog to beaches, even people who did not have dog in the past, join others to show their opposition to the law. In exchange, government should promote energy-efficient life style through the means that they control. For example, there should be informative tv program of the effect of carbon emission. Needless to say, the cumulative emission of carbon will result in intensifying greenhouse effect and make our climate warmer. This warmer climate is not suitable for lots of creature and even may cause extinction. This will convince people to engage in energy-efficient behavior which is good for their environment. Therefore, culture and lifestyle-centered behavior will have positive effect beyond our imagination.
Another point worth mentioning is that the increase in oil and other distilled fuel will have effect on transportation cost and thus the final cost of probably every product will rise. This rise in prices makes people even frustrated and mad at the government. In this day and age of globalization, the online shopping is pretty common. Long-distance shopping necessitate shipping. Knowing that, the final price of each and every product is going to be much higher, due to the fact that the transportation cost should be considered. In our economic climate, people are a spark away from rebellion and revolution and it maybe that spark that stimulate aggressive behaviors in society.
To conclude, having considered all points discussed previously, I firmly believe that the rise in the price of gasoline and electricity is not the only effective way to save energy. This is because not only it results in negative behavior, but it also increases the overall cost of living.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'dogged'.
Suggestion: dogged
...o beaches, even people who did not have dog in the past, join others to show their ...
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Line 3, column 991, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun creature seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of creatures'.
Suggestion: lots of creatures
...This warmer climate is not suitable for lots of creature and even may cause extinction. This wil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, such as, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16705336427 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93083253362 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559164733179 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3187711344 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.227272727 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5909090909 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36363636364 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154630745826 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416174311097 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574145368618 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112432171371 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731974549791 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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