Do you agree that it is better to work for business owned by someone else than to work for the business of one's own family.
The business is so important to our career. It is where we spent time to give our strength. Some people believed that it is better to work for the company owned by someone else, while others stated that they want to work for the family company. In my view, I agree that it is better to work for a business owned by someone else than to work the business of one's own family for two reasons.
The main reason is that it is difficult to criticize the employee who is your relative or family member. If you work with your relatives or member of your family, you will tend to respect your relatives and could not pick on them when they do the wrong things. For example, when I have worked for my aunt's company, I have to manage a sales team. The team has six people and one of them is my aunt's daughter, whose name is Laura. On the day, we did a project, but Laura did not anything. She went to work late, most of the time she played a video game and chatted with her friend, thereby she can not send me her part of the project. When we had a meeting, I criticize her before all the members of the team. Laura, therefore, told to her mother that I humiliated before many people. My aunt was really angry and dismissed me from the team. Furthermore, her daughter, Laura was chosen for the leadership of the team As you can see, sometimes there is no fairness in the family company.
Another reason is that sometimes your opinions could not take seriously. Some of your relatives do not want you to intervene to the strategy of the development company. If you give some strategies for your company, they immediately reject it. For instance, when I worked for my cousin’s law firm, I pitched my project which about the development path for the firm. Though she said that my project was really good, after that I heard from my colleagues that my project was eradicated. Instead of my project, my cousin chose her project for law firm. This experience taught me that in a business owned by someone else, you could be taken seriously.
In sum, though many people like working in the family business because of comfortable, with me the business run by someone else is better. Not only will you feel free to give the opinion but also you can be more appreciated. You should choose to work in a business owned by someone else.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42424242424 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39104488606 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452214452214 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2833520312 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0833333333 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.875 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95833333333 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41827956855 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120112204961 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164081433073 0.0737576698707 222% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.315857270445 0.150856017488 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.178864297539 0.0645574589148 277% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.06 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.72 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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