Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The earth we live in is the place that we should protect. it is where various species exist. some people would believe that human activity is ruining the earth, while others feel that it makes the earth a better place to live. In my view, the human would damage the world with their harm activity.
The main reason is that there is plenty of industrial zone in the world. Nowadays, numerous countries have industrialization thereby many industrial zones exist within a few years. As far as we know, the factories produce tremendous amount of emission and wastewater to the environment. that polluting the surrounding environment. For example, in 2008, Vedan company in my country discharging untreated waste into the thi vai river, thereby polluting part of the thi vai river. most of the river was polluted and the residents nearby it can not use the water for their living. Furthermore, the river also stinks, therefore, the stench of the river cause discomfort for those who go by the river. As you can see, the existence of the industrial zone would cause the climate crisis and harm the world.
Another reason is that the over-exploitation of natural resources. people are increasingly over-exploiting natural resources for their activity. The natural resource is limited, if we do not desist from using the natural resource, the earth will be utterly damaged. When the resource is depleting, the life of the earth and people is being threatened. For instance, most of the tropical forest in my neighborhood has been logging for human activity like smuggling, using for the paper industry, making the furniture, etc. people felled a great number of trees that cause the air pollution and natural disaster. In 2009, because of the over- exploitation of the wood, the flood causes the catastrophic disaster in my area. many people lost their homes, some people were missed and even people died. this experience taught me that, protect the environment is extremely critical for the earth.
In sum, though some may claim that human activity can make the earth a better place to live, while I think that the earth is being harmed by human activity. Everybody has to stop their activity to protect the environment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02432432432 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73158754013 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532432432432 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.036175573 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8260869565 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0869565217 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47826086957 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308054536169 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849674508327 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126752182836 0.0737576698707 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250308407569 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.164158180469 0.0645574589148 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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