TPO 30. Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, a prime and fundamental controversy about the issue whether works of the human-being are suitable for the globe or not. Some people would claim that activities of the people around the world affects the earth appropriately. However, as well as I am concerned, I prefer to illustrate that human-kind badly influenced on the planet for two following reasons.
The first and foremost reason that I want to make a suggestion about is the unconvenient impacts of the expantion of a single especies on the earth. A relevant example can shed light to this assertion. 3 years ago, When I was working in a combined project of artists and scientist, in the southeast of Asia, I noticed a harmul effect of the polulation growth in that part of the world on the environment. Consequently, I started strong debates with the manager of the scientific part of the job about the rate of child delivery and the speed of destructions in the area. Hence, I gained information about the fact that human-being causes a big disaster on earth soon.
The second reason that must be taken into account is about the usage of the minerals and other things under the ground. For instance, results of a recent research stuy at George Washington University revealed that human used earth sources swiftly in the last century. On the other hand, the head professor of the research claims that the human will destroy all mountains, forests, and oceans in the forthcoming time by this model of living. Thus, experts in GUW are working in a similar produced world by students to analyze the future of life on global.
To sum up, I firmly believe that human is the most dangerous species for the environment that lives on the earth for two main reasons. first, the growth in the number of people is surprisingly high. What is more, human-kind exploits all of the resources of his/her habitat in an abnormal way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...ives on the earth for two main reasons. first, the growth in the number of people is ...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...high. What is more, human-kind exploits all of the resources of his/her habitat in an abno...
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Line 7, column 274, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an abnormal way" with adverb for "abnormal"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...all of the resources of his/her habitat in an abnormal way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, so, thus, well, for instance, as well as, to sum up, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81288343558 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74289566117 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567484662577 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8121401397 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.6 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7333333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.86666666667 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239901971539 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708141810357 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518206028239 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138673153125 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213501749845 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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