Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Humans have lived on the Earth from generation to generation. Some people argue that human activity harms the world, while others believe that it improves the Earth better for living. As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree that human activities such as hunting and manufacturing are harming the Earth. This essay will provide further aspects and examples to support this idea in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, air and water are contaminated by an enormous amount of industrial wastes. Most industries that make a number of human equipment cause a lot of wastes, such as dross and carbon dioxide, emit to the air and rivers. Consequently, polluted air and water directly damage both animals and humans are vulnerable. For instance, Bangkok has an essential river name Chao Phraya, and today it has been filled with garbage from industries. Therefore, fish and other aquatic animals died, and the river is also smelly. Moreover, bacteria in the river is able to cause individuals feel sick and acute diarrhea.
Secondly, hunting plays a key role in animal extinction. Humankind hunt and eat most creatures, and it critically affects an animals’ existence. Furthermore, humans not only hunt for eating but also trap many types of animals for collecting such as tigers and deer. To illustrate this, a tiger, one of wild creatures that is endangered, is a vital factor in the food chain of woodlands. Because of many people favor to shoot tigers as a game, these days, Thailand forests have tigers less than a thousand. If people do not stop this hunting, tigers in Thailand will be truly extinct.
In conclusion, I certainly maintain the belief that the Earth is harmed by human action. This is due to the fact that human’s industrial progress extremely causes pollution to the environment, and animals are also gradually decreased by mankind’s hunting.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13268608414 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8171218972 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611650485437 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.2491669275 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.1111111111 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2296177772 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732125765626 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889041284087 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149337814495 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121132230948 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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